Time Isn't Everything

A poem based on the concept of being able to capture time. I hope you enjoy it!

Time Isn't Everything

If I could trap time in a bottle,

I promise I'd use it for good,

I'd give my mom a few more years,

and give my daughters all I could.

I'd tie the bottles in beautiful ribbon,

I'd tie them up in silky bows,

I'd give a lot of them away as gifts,

Or sell them in traveling shows.

Perhaps they'd call me Father Time,

As they came to see my face,

Maybe to get a bottle from me,

Wrapped up in pretty lace.

But all the people I had seen,

Would inevitably fall away,

As I couldn't give time to everyone,

To live another day.

Then I'd sit alone with all my time,

With nothing left but me,

And realize that time isn't everything,

But the people within it, you see.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! Please feel free to let me know what you think!

(Also feel free to check out my other poem "The Wind Still Needs a Chime" as it is in the same fashion as this piece and hopefully I will be able to create a series of these.)

Extra info on this poem:
1st Place in a WC contest with 62 submissions.
Runner Up in a WC contest with 97 submissions.
2nd Best Poet in a WC contest with 21 submissions.

Reviews

[pia]

this is absolutely amazing. i loved the concept and the portrayal of how time is so important and valuable but at the end of the day. its the people within the time frame who are more valuable
loved th structure and the words you used for such a powerful poem

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much! I always love the comments I get on this particular piece. I am glad you read it, thank you!

[Hasi]

Super, this is absolutely true

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much

[evertheoptimist]

This is so beautiful! I really love the opening lines - very powerful. I think the simplicity of the language is probably my favourite part because it means the true focus is on its message.

[Nicholas Duboe]

I appreciate it thank you

[Wajiha Nayeem]

so wonderful this is.....great work...beautifully penned.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you so much

[Wajiha Nayeem]

pleasure....

[Isimbabi]

This is great work. Reall great work. It's a truely beautiful poem, start to finish.

Great job

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much!

[CMC]

Incredible, breathtaking, magnificent. All words that don't live up to the stunning energy this poem outputs. Time is indeed not everything, but rather who we spend it with.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Wow what a great comment I really appreciate it! It means a lot to me

[Lady Glitter]

This is beautiful. Rhyming but not trite. I especially like the 4th stanza. This reads like a beautiful song, and could probably be set to a lovely melody, maybe guitar. I was all dreamy-eyed as I neared the end!

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it

[Zachary]

I really enjoyed this poem, very straight and to the point. But yet this has a story that is so beautiful. Great job

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you! Im so glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your comment!

[MrsDBeukes]

Unique, i really enjoy your work

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much!

[B]

This comparison you draw of time and people is so smart.
We think moments are all we own
but maybe the people who exist in our life is all we could ever have

Bravo

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much! I really appreciate it!

[Ceci]

That was wonderful. Not only were you able to create emotion in the poem, but a little bit of a story as well. The motto of the here and now, not what I could have done is very strongly implied in this poem. Great Job. I look forward to your future works.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Im very glad you like it! This is actually part of a series of poems. "The Wind Still Needs a Chime" and "Even If Dreams Come True" follow the same format (in case you we're interested)