Time Isn't Everything

A poem based on the concept of being able to capture time. I hope you enjoy it!

Time Isn't Everything

If I could trap time in a bottle,

I promise I'd use it for good,

I'd give my mom a few more years,

and give my daughters all I could.

I'd tie the bottles in beautiful ribbon,

I'd tie them up in silky bows,

I'd give a lot of them away as gifts,

Or sell them in traveling shows.

Perhaps they'd call me Father Time,

As they came to see my face,

Maybe to get a bottle from me,

Wrapped up in pretty lace.

But all the people I had seen,

Would inevitably fall away,

As I couldn't give time to everyone,

To live another day.

Then I'd sit alone with all my time,

With nothing left but me,

And realize that time isn't everything,

But the people within it, you see.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! Please feel free to let me know what you think!

(Also feel free to check out my other poem "The Wind Still Needs a Chime" as it is in the same fashion as this piece and hopefully I will be able to create a series of these.)

Extra info on this poem:
1st Place in a WC contest with 62 submissions.
Runner Up in a WC contest with 97 submissions.
2nd Best Poet in a WC contest with 21 submissions.

Reviews

[pia]

this is absolutely amazing. i loved the concept and the portrayal of how time is so important and valuable but at the end of the day. its the people within the time frame who are more valuable
loved th structure and the words you used for such a powerful poem

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much! I always love the comments I get on this particular piece. I am glad you read it, thank you!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is a wonderful poem about time. I love time poems, thanks for entering this into my competition submit your best piece, good luck
its very well written and very original i enjoyed this a lot

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you for reading!

[Carla]

This is mind blowing, absolutely true and put into such profound words. It's true beauty, congratulations.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much! Your comment is well appreciated!

[Shikon Akuma Ookami]

The outlook and conclusion to this is simply wonderful. The flow is easy to read and understand too. A real joy to read.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much!

[barleygirl]

GREAT TITLE & good use of it at the end, too. This is one of the most brilliant & lyrical poems I’ve read in a week of steady reviewing. I’m enchanted by rhyme & rhythm, well-crafted & perfect lilt for this affectionate romp thru your inner circle of feelings. I love the way your poem dances inside reality & then outside, alternately. Your heart of love is what can be felt the most palpable here, more than most poems that TRY to be about love. This aspect of your writing is so strong, I almost forgot the poem was about TIME (rather than being a love poem & I’m not a big fan of love poems!) Your poem bubbles with enthusiasm & playfulness (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Nicholas Duboe]

This is one of the most flattering reviews I have read. I love this poem has resonated so well with so many. Thank you very much for reading and taking the time to comment. I greatly appreciate it!

[Riddhi]

I just loved it..Such an amazing poem..I loved the main theme and the way you portrayed it is worth appreciating..Time is indeed important but the people within the time frame are more valuable..Loved the way you expressed yourself..
Great read..
Keep writing..

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the comment!

[Riddhi]

Your welcome..

[A.G.]

This is such an amazing poem!
Beautifully written and from the heart. Personal and filled with understanding. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing Nicholas! 😊
-Angelina 🖤

[Nicholas Duboe]

Much appreciated! Thank you!

[A.G.]

😊 your welcome

[Dara]

Sorry but I've got absolutely nothing negative to say about this.
Lovely lovely poem.
Deep and quite meaningful

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha i love this Nicholas! easy flow ...rhyming is fine .. nothing forced ... i get a sense of a childrens' poem somehow (i mean that as a good thing) ... the lesson is universal and enduring ..nice job says i ..enjoyed reading
E.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you for reading!

[Onlyme]

This is simply beautiful. Thank you for sharing, your love, compassion, honesty and hopes and dreams.

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much for reading!

[Sudipta Dash]

Beautiful concept. Wonderfully written. Considering another point of view, probably, we can trap time you know. Of course not in a bottle though... but yes, we can trap them in our writings and pass it on to the next generation.
Indeed, I agree it's not about time, it's the people with whom we share the time with. Very nice...

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you very much for the kind words. This is by far one of my favorite poems I have written measured in fantastic comments.