Exotic Love

Love isn't a decision. It's a feeling. If we could decide who we loved, it would be much simpler, but much less magical.

Scarlet eyes whisper through my mortal heart

Creatures coldly burn our bond apart

Your soul heavenly grows at night 

His eerie touch fears the sunlight

 

Affection dangerously thirsts for temptation

Immorality propels with devastation

His pale skin softens the morbid whether

Death falls as light as an angelic feather

 

His fangs beautifully rot my veins 

Your hypnotic voice delicately bites with pain  

My flesh strangely hungers with desire 

Tasting the love of a Vampire

Awards:

Awesome you're the Winner

Jun 4, 2011

• Poems of Any
• Exotic Love

1st runner up

Jun 11, 2011

• Anything.
• Exotic Love

 

Author's Note

Thanks for the positive reviews, I extremely appreciate it :D
And for the negative reviewers, always remember this: "Critics are like eunuchs in a harem: they know how it's done, they've seen it done every day, but they're unable to do it themselves." - Brendan Francis Behan
I'll continue to write even when you bring me down!!

Reviews

[Sothe (White Princess)]

Nice piece. I myself like writing about vamps, even if I hate Twilight with a burning passion. This describes old fashioned vampires though, the good old ones I have in my stories and not the terrible messed up ones that make no sense that people come up with now a days.....don't get me wrong I don't mean to offend anyone, but I have a right to express my opinion. Anyways, I love the image you included and the details are great for a short piece. Well Done.

[light and ashes]

This poem is very beautiful and passionate. The beautiful and tragic case of loving a vampire.

[~ Moonlight ~]

I love it that you use such a effective words, it really puts a chill down my spine! Great Job!

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

Very good I knew you have a great gift in you^^

[Kiri Nells]

This is a very enjoyable work here. There's a great flow not only from the words, but from the emotion behind the words. I'm going to assume that your negative reviews were about the fact that there's a bit of cliche vampire action going on. At this point in society, everyone is pretty much sick of vampires, and everyone who isn't tends to be obsessed. I, however, see past the constant vampire-ness of the world to look at the amazing talent portrayed here, and maybe even a bit of a deeper message. Thank you for sharing this piece with me and I hope that those who are turned off by the blood-suckers get attacked by one. :)

To clear things up, I actually get very irritated by Twilight, romance, teen drama, etc. BUT I do love a good artist, and that's just what you are. (plus, I'm writing a story involving a vampire-like human and LOTS of blood...just no romance or teen drama- so I can't really rag too much on those who like vampires)

[Enjoy]

The first verse I feel like it would work better as "the sun's light" but it is your piece. I do enjoy "coldly burning," interesting imagery, for sure. All in all, it's a good piece and I enjoy it quite a bit.

[Raven Starhawk]

This is beyond words. Its captions are making me speechless and yet your writing deserves words that accurately describe its well honed capabilities. You penned this exceptionally well.

[Razorblade Kisses]

This was good, I liked it a lot.

[.......]

I enjoyed this write, Very nice flow and rhyme scheme. Very nicely written

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A wonderful tempo to this poem, brings it to life perfectly.