Goodbye world.

Goodbye world.

A Poem by Mimi

You said you wouldn't

You promised you'd stay

Live without you? I know I couldn't

I don't want to listen to what you have to say

Why did you leave

I want you back for good

It's getting harder to breathe

This didn't end the way it should

My heart hurts from the pain you cause

I want to be happy, but I don't know how

You left because I had a few flaws

Why can't you stay for now

I just have one thing left to say

I could have never done this to you

I love you to this day

Well, I suppose that will have to do

My life is slipping away, I wish he never came

I really wish I didn't let you die

I don't think I can ever be the same

And now, I guess this is goodbye...

© 2010 Mimi


Author's Note

Mimi
I was sad last night, I was crying when I wrote this too..

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A sad poem. The pain and loneliness is felt in your words. Separation leave us wishing for a better ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Amazing how a beautiful poem can emerge from sadness and grief. Like a phoenix rising from the ashes your talent is flying higher. A lovely rhyme and flow to this poem perhaps flowing from your tears. Keep writing, you have a gift worth sharing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Hi Mimi,

Yes, I can see you crying as you wrote this. This is a bitter-sweet poem. Loved the whole poem.

This is one of your better pieces, and as you are a remarkable young poet, that means this is an amazing piece and congratulations are in order. This is an truly fine write.

My very best regards,

Rick

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is a sad poem. It took me by surprise. I didn't expect it to be so honest and candid. I like the straight forward nature in this poem. You simply spoke your mind.

My heart hurts from the pain you cause

I want to be happy, but I don't know how

You left because I had a few flaws

Why can't you stay for now

I really liked that a lot. I hear music when I read this poem.
You are a natural song writer.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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