Five

Time is bliss

While I spend it

With you

 

My head filled

With green posies

For you

 

My world laid

Bare and open

To see

 

Feeling

The warmth you give

For me

 

Hearing

The words whispered

To me

 

Tasting

The tenderness of

Your lips

 

Smelling

The sweetness

Of you

 

Loving you

Holding me

Together

Reviews

[Making Tracks]

I like all of these things as you have written them...however, and this is a personal thing, the caps on every line are distracting...as if the lines are independent of each other, yet you have crafted the words with breaks in place...just me

nice words in a pleasant voice


That is how i wanted it to be - indepandant of each line i mean. However you have started me re-thinking on this piece. Thanks hon

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I like all of these things as you have written them...however, and this is a personal thing, the caps on every line are distracting...as if the lines are independent of each other, yet you have crafted the words with breaks in place...just me

nice words in a pleasant voice