If its a baby i want its a baby Ill get

With the creation of the artificial womb a couplle fights over who will carry the baby

The clink of mottled brown " green bottles echoed throughout the parlor followed by gusts of laughter and chatter. James Dubois sat in the center of the hurricane of celebration.  He sat reclined in a suede lazy-boy, legs splayed over the comfortable cushion his thin fingers wrapped around a bottle of Euphoric. The liquid warmed his insides like a child with a mug of hot cocoa on a winter day. The Euphoric sloshed around his stomach causing him to feel increasingly giddy by the second. He set the bottle down leaning back as if he were in deep reminiscent thought. His thoughts moved at a sluggish pace. The nano " bugs running beneath his skin trying desperately to get rid of the alcohol charging through his veins. His eyes felt heavy with every blink.

 His thick brown eyelashes felt like weights, he could barely remember what he was supposed to be doing.  Where his wife was, where he lived but he knew for sure that at the moment he was at Erwin Hayes Baby shower. His wife and he were having their first child.

 

‘How fortunate for them’ he thought not like he was going to get his child anytime soon.  

Small blue boxes with candy floss bows littered across a long rectangular table . Soft orange-gold fairy lights glowed from above giving everything a frosted tinge. James took another sip from his glass enjoying the feeling of the cold glass in between his wet, warm lips. Guests milled around Erwin giving him approving pats and telling him words of support.

 

‘If Katie weren’t so fixed on having a traditional pregnancy that could be, would be me,’ James chuckled bitterly to himself.

‘It would be me surrounded by Tech-heads and Nano- Junkies by Younglings and City jumpers,’ James shook his head trying to feel happy for his friend.

 Erwin seemed happy enough already his stomach swollen and blue and yellow custom lights flashing beneath his skin. It added a halo of happiness to his already overflowing pot. James wanted just that. To feel happy, to carry a life that depended on him to survive. Life that his wife and he would teach and mold. That he would eventually send off to  school and pick up after a long day at work.  Katie saw James sunk in the corner that he had retreated himself in drowning himself in his thoughts.

“Hey you,” She lightly pushed his shoulder. James looked up at her.

“Hey yourself,” Katie smiled and pried the empty bottle from James hands and settled herself onto his lap wrapping her arms around his neck comfortingly breathing in the scent of  shaving cream, Calvin Klein and alcohol. 

She kissed his toasty almond colored forehead resting her head a top James neatly shaven head.

“It’s not fitting for you to be over here sulking,” She whispered .

“I know it’s just, I’m just thinking about stuff,” He made a wild gesture as if to explain everything with his circular moment.

“I really want to go the route of tradition James, we’ve talked about this,” Katie’s voice washed over him  like a wave. 

“I really want a baby though,”

“I have a womb that’s ready and able and we don’t need you going through any unnecessary surgeries,”

James felt his anger flare up. 

“I think I should congratulate Erwin,”

James pushed out of the chair pushing Katie off of his lap. Katie stumbled in her heelless stilettos looking pleadingly at James. Her teal dress fanned out as she stumbled away from him the rippling of the dress looked like rain droplets shattering . Her lips were painted red and forced into a line that hid her displeasure. James smoothed out his Tux and pushed through the crowd of multicolored people.

“Excuse me ma’am,” He said nodding to a woman with lithe graceful movements and feline-like features she nodded stepping aside and continuing to drink her blood-martini.

He pranced over to a waiter-bot selected a bubbling Apple mimosa off of the overflowing tray and walked over to  Erwin.

Erwin stood next to his wife giving his onlookers a toothy grin. His reptilian skin stretched tight in his smile. A hand rested on his stomach his clawed fingers affectionately petting the baby bump. James walked over to him laying a hand on his longtime child hood friends shoulder.  

“Let’s have a toast to modern technology!” he drunkenly announced his body swaying precariously with each word.

 Erwin nervously held James hands trying to stabilize him. 

“Are you ok man you really don’t look to good,”

“Nonsense Erwin I’m better, no I’m the best! I wanted to congratulate you and Remena on your baby!” Erwin laughed nervously as James stumbled away.

 He stumbled past Katie looking into her soft chocolate colored eyes and on into the foyer away from the clinking glasses and warm lights and into the milky loneliness of the foyer.

James wiped his brow and stumbled to the Locomoter. He punched in his address in the key pad. Katie watched James leave wishing their conversation had ended differently tonight she would have to use the bed separator. Katie raked a hand through her perfectly curled hair and took in a deep breath the air smelling rancid and two sweet all of the sudden. She shook her head and clicked out to the glass terrace that overlooked the city. Cars sped by in a blur underneath her feat Jets streaked across the sky making pretty patterns. 

The moon, the moon no longer seemed to exist to her people nor did the stars. Katie's spider-like fingers reached inside her purse her thin mantis like body leaned against the rail of the terrace. She let her hair ripple back and she enjoyed the sensation of danger that coiled up in her stomach. It was nice to feel something besides frustration and well placed euphoria after all the quarreling with James it was slowly breaking her down. She pulled out and E-ciggerette and flicked the cool aluminum button breathing in deeply the smoke washed over her like a calming breeze. She giggled to herself smiling. She smoked herself silly and James Drunk himself to tears they were wonderfully matched.

 "It's just so ridiculous that he wants to bare our baby and I'm not letting him," Katie relaxed a bit more her wrist loosely flicking.

A woman with delicate monroe  features nodded to Katie as she sat on a glass bench and pulled out a cigarette lighting it with a small compact silver lighter. The woman's painted rouge lips wrapped around the starched dry paper drawing in a breath through the filter.

"You like it old fashioned huh?" Katie asked drowsily sinking lower against the railing.

 The woman nodded "It keeps me alive and separates the ninnies from the intellectuals or the intellectual ninnies as I like to say she said smiling pearly milk teeth grinning at her. She let out a puff of smoke her harsh blue eyes piercing through the cloud.

"So what are you having? Husband trouble?"

Katie took another drag "Yeah Its just been going on for a long time and I'm," She sighs pausing to properly seat herself "Tired,"

"Husbands aren't like they used to be these days you have to whip them into shape using ice or fire,"

Katie waved off the notion " Oh no,no,no It's me not him, me who let this fight escalate to what its become and I regret it,"

Monroe laughed Her blonde hair ruffling. " I have mine whipped into shape and trained, he's probably waiting for me to come home. 

"Thats not nessascary I just want us to get closure,"

"I'm surprised you haven't divorced him yet," The woman shook her head. "You are a strong woman to let a man treat you pish posh and--"

"Shut your pie-hole woman! He just wants to have our baby!"

Katie screamed exasperatedly wishing the woman would just shut up and dissipate.

Monroe woman stood her cloud dress floating with her "I'm sure you'll no what to do," She dropped her cigarette off the edge of the terrace and walked away to join the lively party again. 

Katie flicked off her cigarette and stepped back into the Penthouse. She waved to Renema and Erwin and headed to the coat room to retrieve her coat. "Tomorrow the madness will end,' she thought to herself.After all love was a losing game in the end everyone seems to get screwed over so why no have fun getting there.

 

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James stumbled into his home his body felt numb and body thick. He lumbered into his room pushing through the glass doors and into his bed the bed immedeatly adjusted to James weight and body form. James pulled his legs to his chest pulling off his black dress shoes and socks. He shakily un did his tie and threw his head into his pillow. 

"House play soothing music," He whispered.

"Yes master Dubois would you like me to select the track?" James nodded.

The smooth plucking of a ukelele swirled into his eardrum followed by the jingling of wind chimes.

"There no combination of words I could put on the back of a post card

No song I could sing but I could try for your heart 

Our dreams are made of real things 

like a shoebox of photographs with sepia toned lovin'"

James let his head loll to the side. He was a man, how he treated Katie had been disrespectful and made him feel and look like less than what he was. It was just he was fixed on carrying their child and It perplexed him when Katie tried to explain that she thought he shouldn't have the right or chance to do such things. James knew she had these view because of her rural upbringings but things had changed. People changed. 

Love is the answer for at least most of the questions in my heart 

Why are we here and Where did we go

And How come we're so hard

Its not easy sometimes and life can be deceiving 

I'll tell you something its better when we're together

Katie slipped off her heels still in the airy bliss that had enveloped her.She walked into the room she shared with James leaning against the door frame watching his chest rise up and down. 

"Sometimes it just makes me wonder, how we ended up in this stupid mess,"

Katie smile undoing the clasp on her star dust necklace and stowing it in a small velvet box. 

"Well we are still young theres much to learn about love and life still,"

She gave James a crooked smile their eyes nervously meeting.

"About the baby situation, I don't care anymore it's tearing us apart and I can't stand it," James rolled over on his side his back turned to Katie

Mmm, it's always better when we're together
Yeah, we'll look at the stars when we're together
Well, it's always better when we're together
Yeah, it's always better when we're together

Katie slipped her shimmering gown off and threw it into the recycler. She shook her head her curls bouncing like a thousand writhing black snakes. She slid under the covers with James kissing the base of his neck and wrapping her thin lightly muscled arms around his torso. 

"I was being a fool, it took talking to Crazy- Monroe for me to remember what I really wanted,"

James shut his eyes his mouth feeling dry and pasted closed

"And what was that?" He mumbled he rolled over to face her his nose pressed against hers their foreheads kissing 

 

"And all of these moments
Just might find their way into my dreams tonight
But I know that they'll be gone
When the morning light sings
And brings new things
For tomorrow night you see
That they'll be gone too
Too many things I have to do
But if all of these dreams might find their way
Into my day to day scene
I'd be under the impression
I was somewhere in between
With only two
Just me and you
Not so many things we got to do
Or places we got to be
We'll sit beneath the mango tree now"

"That I wanted you to be carry our baby, and know that I love you and know that you are an amazing man and everything I could have asked for and more,"

Her eyes misted over and a crystal tear traveled down her hear shaped mocha face.

James watched the tear seemingly captivated . He brushed the tear away smiling happily. "I love you Katie,"

  

Katie smiled at her husband " Go to sleep, your going to have a heck of a headache after your nano's are done with you, and we have that big appointment. 

James smiled at his wife "I was thinking after we have the kid we should move out to the country," 

"Why?"

"So they can see the moon before it really dissapears,"

 

Author's Note

I copied this from my word so I know I know formattings off I decided thought to try my hand at Sci fi and need to know how I did what I should do what needs work and help and thats stuff if I havent got to ur read request im sorry ill try ive just been busy with school and stuff. Id just really appreciate a review.

Reviews

[Remember Courage]

I think the new addition was fantastic. Monroe and the E cigarette was a excellent idea. I loved the Robots and the music selection thing that was cute. Made me wish something like that was real. Who knows when I am gonna need a sad song playing while I drink myself blind. This is a great story and I am glad you shared it with me. Can't wait for more!
-Courage

[Tomislav Petricevic]

The story is interesting; the only thing I have to object are some grammar/punctuation mistakes. You might want to fix those, since it's sometimes confusing to understand what you mean.
Good job on descriptions, though, I liked them.

[Euphemius]

I thought your dialogue fit together very well and that the characters interacted with each other perfectly, on such a level that made it entertaining to witness. You really set the mood with your descriptions. There are some grammar issues that I think you ought to look out for, and I think you should be careful with using cliche methods of description. I also think you should pace yourself with the way you introduce character - I found it a bit odd how you began talking about life and happiness only a few hundred words in.

Also, I wasn't really getting that this as a sci-fi. It doesn't feel much like it. I know you tried... (What was that E-cigarette thing all about) but it just didn't work for me.

Anyway, good job overall, I'll be looking forward to your next installment :)

[Persona]

I was pleasantly surprised when I began reading. The plot is interesting to me - I love sci-fi! I did think though that it seems to lack emotion in the start, so try not to list as much (i,e. The Euphoric...). Don't be afraid to use a little non-standard grammar. (Bad gramma). I don't mean make spelling mistakes - I mean it's okay to word sentences the way they shouldn't be so it sounds more fluid.
For your title, it could be a little snappier. (Shorter). Try to make sure you use capitalisation in it too or else people might be a little put off.
don't look "to" good. "too" Check little things like that!
"two sweet" too.
"necessary." If word didn't tell you of your spelling...well it helps to prove read work before asking others to read it. I don't mind a little bad spelling but you do it too often.
Um I kind of feel like you got bored and did all these descriptions and yet the only thing that moved the plot forward was the dialog and it's long then it seems like you gave up and just let her be a little romantic.
I think it could be better if one of them is pregnant (it's what I expected getting into the story) and there to be a huge conflict and it wasn't there. With such an angry title "If it's a baby I want..." I expected some big fall-out and it was nowhere near a big fallout.
On the plus side, good idea for a story. Your descriptions are beautiful and very unique and your characters (mostly) come across as real people.

[emilythestrange]

Cool.I love stuff like this

[A]

I love the description throughout. The flow throughout the story helps me as a reader to stay interested. I really love the sci-fi feel throughout. Great Job!(:

[That_Girl]

Alright, I'm just going to be completely honest with you. The story line is incredibly interesting and even though I hate sci-fi, I would strongly consider reading more if you continue on with this story. The writing and vocabulary are strong. Your only downfall is the grammar. There are several run-on sentences and punctuation errors. Those, however, are easy fixes. Very good job!
-Avy

[Honey54]

I agree with Kenzie...you words are very descriptive! im jealous lol this story had me stuck to the screen i love the whole layout and plot...great job sweety!

[Bexfinch]

Thank you so much !!

[Kenzie Morg]

Wow. This is really great! I love this. Ugh I wish I could write like you. I'll be working on it this summer at writing camp.