REGINERATION

Our society is like a Phoenix, regenerating

If we are to not love

But be consumed by hate

Burning In her embers

Bathing in her essence

I pray 

That man continues to drink from her flask

Intoxicated

Stumbling farther into the dark

Stabbing the wound that bore you

Revoking the bosom that coddled you 

Biting the hand that once fed you

I pray 

That we die out

From the blackness of our hearts

The nepotism buried in families

choking the roots

Time 

Used only to 

Articulate an unseen enemies demise

I pray

The knife slicing blindly in the dark

Bites back 

That our gluttony 

Rises 

Then falls with us

Buried in a shallow grave

That our leaders 

Are overthrown 

Their facade as good men

melted away like plastic

That the monuments seemingly permanent

Collapse 

Making us succumb to our inferiority

I pray 

for mankind to become 

A pheonix

I pray for us

 to be reborn from our ashes

When we are 

I pray we remember 

The thread used to weave the new fabric. 

Reviews

[Brianna Van Zandt]

I am going to critique your spelling/grammar here. First, your title.... "Regeneration" not "Regineration." Second: "Articulate an unseen enemies demise." You used "enemies" instead of "enemy's." You are referring to the demise of a specific enemy so it should be "enemy's." Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[Tina Kline]

Very powerful words and imagery in this piece. The darkness of what mankind can be, all the destruction, the hate, the pain, the despair that is seemingly driving mankind to destroy itself yet at the end of the poem there is hope that mankind can rise up out of this darkness and perhaps be better if only we learn. I enjoyed your poem. It is well written and easy to read yet its not at all a simple poem. You're very creative and talented.

[Tasha]

This was dark and powerful, I will totally remember it. Great write!

[Emily]

This is a very powerful piece. It is very dark and slightly disturbing, but I believed that the strong emotions helped to drive home your message. This piece is strongly written, but I cannot agree with you that mankind must get worse before it can get better. I believe that the world is full of pain and horric evil, as can be seen most recently by the Coneticut shooting, but I do not think that it is beyond redemption. I do like your ending imagery of the pheonix- something from nothing. We can rebuild. I like that message that there is always a fresh beginning for those who want to reach out and claim it.

[Conor Larkin]

This is an extremely dark piece. It's obviously filled with a lot of angry feelings, yet the hint of redemption at the end portrays a distinct sense of hope for the future. Very thought provoking; well done.

[biggsteve]

i like that thats great