Block

Its like a car without a engine on a perfect summer afternoon a empty highway

nothing more beautiful do i know.

Your a great writer the bullshit comments are given to help sugar coat the truth.

 

Like  being told you have cancer in the same breath the doctor ses have a good day

and hands you a overpriced bill.

I see it so i dont have to hear it from other's to know.

 

Its dead in the water like a ship out at sea yerning for a wind to grace the sails .

She's a twisted lover who'll never be true to any one person.

Who could f*****g blame her anyways.

 

A half empty bottel and a blank page they go togather for me as misery and love.

Smother the creative fire and you'll just stink up the party.

Sorry i cant stand to be around.

 

Telling jokes bullshit goes better with some funny lies.

Lets dance befor the closing time call breaks the illusion my dear.

I'll hold you close as once befor and pretend instead of know.

What was can never again be.

 

 

Bitter like shots from a seven year old bottle captured rage isnt as free as new found vice.

We were lovers now were more like slaves.

junkies desperate for that fix .

 

You cant make what isnt there.

I sit at the desk and try to imagine it the way it once so easily flowed.

Sweetheart can I view that picture a solider so far from everything we once knew.

 

Two worlds exist and im not all that in to sugar coated lies.

The chair is empty now as the page.

 

Reviews

[Nick.B]

A very emotional poem you managed to create here...well done

[lee von cleef]

Why me,You can think,you can write,Can you make people feel? Do you care? Does it matter?
The wind swallows all who step.The Oceans hide all who walked.Dirt is all we are.

[Becky C Strukamp]

A deep emotionally packed poem. As I read it I could feel a message emerging.

"Two worlds exist and I'm not all that into sugar coated lies,
the chair is empty now as the page"

The message I took from it was, two people together yet not exisiting in eachothers lives, through the sugar coated lies, thus leaving their world void.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the purpose of this poem. I believe many kind of writing sites. On this site I'm polite and kind. Serious mistakes I send in private e-mail. Writing is a learning experience. How many great 20 year old writers in this world? We need life, a lot of experience and the desire always to improve. Poetry is hard to write for me today. I'm stalemated in life. Just work and waiting for death. I tell the young writers. Take notes, combine ideals and read. Few great writers are born. Most have to see hate, violence and war. Love can be a positive motivator also. I enjoyed the thoughts in your poem. Made me think this morning.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very emotive piece filled with bitterness and regret and soul searching. We all find solice from time to time in the amber bottle when disappointed and let down by someone we put our faith into. A fair few typos etc!

[BL]

The assortment of thoughts and images create a colourful tapestry, great write

[Lily Mae]

There's so many things that fly through my mind when I read you.. Not just thoughts but such deep seeded emotion and sometimes it's hard to explain. A touch of sadness and resignation and yet a strength in you knowing your road. The last two lines nailed this so well.. Excellent write Gonzo..xo

[John Patrick Robbins AKA Gonzo]

Lily honestly i can never see what people see in my work in all truth but i truely needed to hear this thank you so very much for reading my favorite hampster.
Cheers and stay crazy your buddy always Gonzo

[Lily Mae]

Well your just wonderful..xo

[writing mojo]

definitely a lot of blocks to see cornered here, I like your random connection you feed through this fishy piece, makes me think of the ego stuck motto on the back of the Lama and Dali, a dandy scar to splendor at, picking at the squirm of words of what goes where, your intricate anticipate wept blocks on blocks of Cubism on Confucianism indeed>>>>great stuff

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The last two stanzas did it for me...it ended with a silent blow. I love that! Yes, indeed we are twisted in this way, like "junkies desperate for that fix."~awesomely described!

"You cant make what isnt there.

I sit at the desk and try to imagine it the way it once so easily flowed.

Sweetheart can I view that picture a solider so far from everything we once knew.



Two worlds exist and im not all that in to sugar coated lies.

The chair is empty now as the page."~ Nicely done!

[John Patrick Robbins AKA Gonzo]

Robbie thank you so very much for this review means everything to me honestly i really didnt knpow if this write was up to par so i kept it from readers for awhile cheers Gonzo

[AlchemicPlutonian]

'She's a twisted lover who'll never be true to any one person.
Who could f*****g blame her anyways.'

She sends her regards, and I'll have her bring some leftovers tomorrow night.

Just don't keep her forever.