Persistence

Just something that popped into mind. I'm having intense writers block.

The clicking of the typewriter keys echoed of the rooms' stone walls. If she didn't get her story out, who would hear it? Nobody would know of the horrors that had occurred to her in the past, how she had to forge herself into a new person. No parents, no friends, nobody. She was all alone, and not sure if she liked it.

They took them all, every single one. Summer Larson is no more, Rayna Everstone has risen. I don't know how i'm going to survive, every single day is a fresh new hell...

A tear dropped onto the page. What was she going to do? Her life was in pieces, and half of them were thrown out the window or knocked under the bed. It was just so frustrating.
Maybe she could leave again, and start over somewhere new. But that was just a fantasy. No matter where they went, they would be watching her. She sobbed into her pillow, wishing things could just go back to the way they used to be. But that was months, perhaps years ago. Time was only an illusion. How much time had passed? How long had she been locked up in this room, alone and starving? The past wouldn't change, only the future could.

Author's Note

Just drabble straight off the top of my head. I have no idea what it's about actually, but if you like it, I want to know.

Reviews

[Persona]

Intense writers block? It didn't read like it at all. I loved this - it was short, but conveyed a trapped character with determination. Even the typewriter - that was a beautiful touch! I hadn't noticed that little 'i' when I first read it - but please to spell check your writing.
I did wonder a few things - starving? When did she last eat? Who are her captures? I feel like it could be better if you gave more of an insight into what's happened. I'd like to know so much more. A few ideas - her famliy was killed, these guys took her, threw her in a room, removed a bag from her head. Maybe she's in the middle of nowhere? Maybe she lives right in the city underground and is only a few feet away from civilisation? Maybe she was kidnapped because she did something bad? Or she has a long lost twin that did a bad thing and they mistook her for the twin? Just make it exciting.

[Michael X]

this is great work and has a sincere plot that exploits the expression,
when the need for success pushes someone over the edge. powerful
and well composed. It leads the reader to want to read a part 2.

[T. Logan]

Maybe I'll do this as a second book. But i'm trying to concentrate on the one i'm doing now. Which is frustrating me. :P

[RachelReaper]

I WANT MORE!!!!!!! write more of this story, I don't know what direction this is going, but I could see where you could do a lot of heart wrenching twists and turns with this book (if you make it into a book) and i like that.