Down in the Dumps

computer malfuntion/relationship malfunction

 

Down in the Dumps

down in the dumps,

down in the dumps,

feeling like, my neck is lumpy,

maybe, I got the mumps

down in the dumps,

down in the dumps,

feeling low, yeah feeling kinda grumpy,

baby, head is covered with bumps

why you wanna go and treat me this way,

you pretend that there's absolutely nothing wrong,

you haven't said a single word all day,

my hard drive is frozen that's why I sing this song

I'm down in the dumps,

down in the dumps,

once again, I'm so confused,

honey, do I have a fever

down in the dumps,

down in the dumps,

I guess you don't give it any matter,

if my bits and bytes or scattered

you make me go and feel like a fool,

pretending that there's absolutely nothing wrong,

you won't even look my way,

my display says System 32, that's why I sing this song

got a wrong length record,

got a block incomplete,

transmission aborted,

yes I'm down in the dumps

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

[R E Tree]

Interesting and entertaining. Almost like your feeling too sorry for yourself. A lot of emotions expressed and I like your conversational tone it makes me feel like your directly talking to me

[Desert Dreamer]

I feel the malfunction...good word choices to show the "down in the dumps" feeling...the "ump" sound does it for me... I like the combination of relationship and computer troubles in your poem, although I don't like these problems in real life. I like your poem.

[r]

this is a bit amusing but it is a good write!

[Wicahpi]

Sorta funny, just in the way 'down in the dumps' is expressed here.
I know someone that won't speak for weeks when upset.
I could see how that could affect one's emotions.
"Sing to be happy, not sad!" isn't that a Carpenter's song? lol

[deeps]

This is a very well written and well expressed write here.
Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme you have going on.