Congratulations

just how many performances can a person sit though?

Congratulations

Congratulations, take a bow, you have stolen the show

you really had me going there, and now I'm eating crow

I was convinced, you changed your mind, a constant fool am I

you sucked me in, with your magic tongue, every word a lie

Congratulations, take a bow, you have claimed the prize

once again, I failed to see, through your deceit and lies

you told me how much you cared, you're really good at this

turned my back, you gave me a shove, into the great abyss

Congratulations, take a bow, you're such a super star

you're number 1, tops on the charts, you've really set the bar

your command, of mystic spells, has climbed right off the charts

you hand to me, my broken heart, in a box of old used parts

Congratulations, take a bow, you've won another crown

is this the end, the final blow, should I dress up like a clown

cause one more time, the joker's wild, I've been the perfect fool

I thought I had, a fighting chance, but you've taken me to school

Congratulations, take a bow, the final act has played,

you cut right through, my hopes and dreams, with your pointed blade

when the program, lists the players, will my name appear

you said I love you, to my face, now you're no longer here

Gomer LePoet...

Reviews

[Sandy Beach]

Hey kickin butt and taking names here my friend. I remember this piece and it still is a very strong and exceptional piece of phrasing, rhyme and content.

[Lorraine]

The repetition of "congratulations" actually create a sarcastic yet bitter tone to your piece. I love the lively feel of this even if it contains so much bitterness and anger. The flow is very nice and I applaud you for the rhyming scheme that does not look in any way forced.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Liza]

congratulations...wow - you've got that out of your system....no more victim! congratulations - you got rid of someone no good who is a fool...

i really enjoy your style, intelligence and slight sarcasm

congratulations :)

[StacyPerry]

As I said my dear Life is a double edged sword; one end to cut our heart out and the other to stab us in the back.

Very well written

[Bunny Thumper]

Astonishing (: I love it .. Nice work (:

[Devons]

This is a tremendous piece of writing and I particularly like how you crammed so much into each line. Nice imagery and similes. The rhyming is very good and sits real good in the mind (tho maybe there's just a couple that don't quite scan as well as the others but it wouldn't take much refinement, they're only a little out). I really think these lines are great..
"when the program, lists the players, will my name appear
you said I love you, to my face, now you're no longer here"

..just to name a couple among many stand-outs. Very well done.

[deeps]

This is so wonderful I like this. It's powerful

[Stacey Watts]

I like this piece. This was a very powerful message. The words were very strong and telling.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A well written poem about losing someone.. I like the style you wrote it in using a 'performance' love the last verse , loved them all.

Chloe

[Ruth]

A powerful poem love, honest and emotional, love this one xx