What's in a Mod?

I wear my hair

As a ceasar in the morn

By midday I'm a Beatle

For sure

In the evening my hair's a mess

Cuz that's when I'm at my best

Loving you

Round and round

Around the town

Under the covers

Down the stairs

Just about everywheres

And it all just...

Messes up my hair

But afterall that, what do I really care? 

Reviews

[Ees]

Love this. Love messy hair too! I like the choice that you made when using the word "morn"
I like the short line: "For sure" a whole lot.


For some reason I read "down the stairs" as "down the stars" which I thought was really cool and odd, so I am slightly disappointed now that I read it correctly and it is something as ordinary as a set of stairs. I think part of it may be that I was expecting something really out there after "Round and round
Around the town" which were slightly abstract lines when compared to the solid visions that you created throughout the rest of the piece. So in that case you may want to tighten that section up with a wee bit of imagery.

I love the last line and that you didn't break it into two lines and put a comma there. It makes it have a great impact. I think this is a fun poem, it shows life and personality and hair, i like hair... hahah

[gombeggar]

very glad u liked this...and much obliged to your advice...but it remains 'stairs' onetheless...perhaps next thyme ;)

[Ees]

Haha, I just like to give my impressions out there just in case. have fun, great poem,
Erin

[gombeggar]

liking your work too...plan to read more of yours

[lillythorn]

Messy hair is good hair he he

[Kaylor Mason]

Never be afraid of the wind in your hair, or having it ruffled by a lover . . . it's what makes life worth living

[Marie Anzalone]

I'm thinking the truest joys in life are those that leave us somehow with mussed hair. Thanks for the smile today!

[gombeggar]

much welcome...happy to help

[marlayesterday]

I love this, so free and fun! :)

[gombeggar]

thanks much