Hard Blues

Hard Blues

A Poem by Llysofar
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This was originally going to be called Hard Black - after a pencil - but a musical theme changed that. It was written on the spur of the moment, with reference to a relationship that ended.

"
Going through
a hard, blue time.
Words rain
like arrows
and I want to fall.
Why did you this?
And why did I that?
God only knows,
Or the sky
that hears everything.
Don't have the music.
Don't have the key,
just a rusty note
and a lid that's burned into me.
Heroes are waiting
to take up the call,
but all that I crave
is a comfortable wall.

 

 

 

© 2007 Llysofar© 2007 Llysofar

© 2008 Llysofar


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First two lines of second stanza; nice! And the whole bit abou the "key" is clever... beautiful. Well writ.

1. "Aand" should be "And" methinks.
2. Should "Heroes" be "Heros"?



Posted 17 Years Ago


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