Him.

Is it plausible that my heart ebbs and flows like the waves of the Pacific? High tide brings about an unmatched unrest in every vein, fiber, and crevice of my being. Wherever you go, I will follow, with the solemn obligation that your every revolution has shaped my soul for an immeasurable eternity, and will continue to do so until our universe ceases to exist. Gravity lingers as a faint aftertaste, then reoccurs, wiping clean a doubt-laden coast. Yet, this regime may only be maintained from a distance. Too near, and my deepest depths would violently demolish the world with unbridled, furious passion boiling beneath the abyss. Too far, and the heartbeat of the briny sea would decease, and life upon Earth would know no greater loss than that of your captivating pulse and perfection. And so, with a heavy heart, my love, I shall forever adore you from afar. My beautiful, elusive Moon. :)

Author's Note

Criticism is appreciated!

Reviews

[Aura Inanna]

Wow, that was beautiful. The feel of it as an extended metaphor is sweet and lovely. But, may I suggest, that you structure it as a poem and not just a block of text? That way the sound would match the feel and completely round out this gorgeous piece. Wonderful read, thank you so much. :)

[Orlando Murcia]

Words like these I have never heard

But most definitely worth the sound

of the invisible letters


Great work Goldie



Orlando M

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

absolutely gorgeous!