The Plague

Free verse poem

Over the bodies

We rise

Bloodlust in the air

We breathe...

Mankinds greatest scourge

Mankinds greatest foe

None can escape

Power creates madness

Madness spreads power

Invisible lines used to divide

Millions in need

Spread out

Forced to fight

Lives turned to dust

Before the guns

Of these sinner

Unforgivable sins committed 

Before god

Skies rain blood

Filling the drains

Flooding the population

Regret, Death and sorrow

Forced in the eyes of a father

Sown throughout gods holy lands

The sins committed by the mistakes of a dieing civilization...

Mistakes of a dieing god

Let gods wrath rain down on this plagued land and wash these memories away

With the blood of the sullied and let it water the crops of a new life

that rises from these forsaken ashes of death and decay.

Author's Note

i am a novice and only post this with hope of getting some help on what i can imrpove or do to improve

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

I like it. The last stanza is a bit much compared to the rest of the poem. That being said, that could be your calling card/ Signature. I like to think that everyone has their own uniqueness to them. They express it in their own style. As long as it fits in with the rest of poem which it does here.

Well done. The more you write the better you get. And this was a great start.

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Ok..... erm it's good but you could make it flow better through use of mor punctuation and joining words (e.g. and, but, however, yet.....) and the last stanza seems too long (lines wise) for the rest of the poem, so break it up a bit more.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you expressed your disappointment and horror at the state of humankind sharply with your poignant write~ a well composed poetic~

[TheOther]

Good work here. Despair and gore. I like it.

[Unloved_kitty]

I think this is a really good poem =]
Nice write !
Keep it up !
~x~