Extollment

Come and speed my soul away
to parts unknown, in midst of day
I forsake my love, I cast ye begone
without a heart, the pain undone
I ponder life in deepest thought;
Will my soul e'er find its mate?
I give my heart, now distraught
to seek the answers beyond the gate
Must sorrow be seen for happiness found?
or for you a toy for tossin' 'round?
My spirits desire to take their leave,
Souls shattered by thine unholy creed

Don't I suffice or do you lust for more?
Drink in the spirits, then the lore,
understand my heart you tore,
a piece, you keep, for ever more

I cannot say, I've e'er felt such a way,
for you, love, that of the fay,
now my soul, thrown to the fray

Cast away, unto the maelstrom,
my casket sinks with the perilous drum,
within, my body torn asunder,
I sit, I wait, and still I wonder
Ye, of malice, queen;
Perpetuation, a falicy

Take away from me my heart,
burn my body, spread the ashes
Broken soul unto many a part,
locked away in hidden caches

I wonder about the point of life;
does happiness come to cause one strife?
Will I ever find my one,
or shall I finish, by my lone?

'T is a fear, burns bright within me,
scar the feelings of my body,
did my heart matter to thee?

Fire ravages throughout my soul,
until my ice can chill it cold
The passion remains for your whole,
I wait for my heart, black as coal,
wading within thine bitter shoals

Seeking a place within thine passion,
I'd gladly mold to fit thine fashion
I'm sorry I could not be thine,
deliver me unto the merciless guillotine

Sever from my body, my spirit,
for the pain of heartbreak I cannot bear it
Together so nicely, we could have fit,
woven, so tightly, bit by bit

And now I extol these vivid pains,
whilst your feelings surely wane
But if you are happy then I am too,
even if the price, be me and you

Your happiness is all that I ask for,
for I gladly bear the pain within my core,
just know, my heart, shall always be yours

Author's Note

Breaking up sucks, folks.

Reviews

[DarkAngelWriter]

Awww... I love this. It brought back feelings I only pray I could forget...

[Destiny]

Breaking up does indeed sux, but however heartless this may sound, it builds character.
Now back to your poem...

Over all I think you're an amazing poet and you have a lot of potential. I like your diction and your writing style in general. You took a very common subject matter and made it your own without being cliche.

However, I do feel your vocabulary is a blessing and a curse. There are times when you show off your vocabulary when simplicity is needed.

That being said, it was a pleasure to read. Ti amo, Toppolino!
♥Destiny♥