on the paper...

feeling forgotten... you know me? hi! im glitch! nice to meet you!

i am word

no one use me

and maybe never...

i am a  line

everyone cross me

and will 'till forever...

i am a page

no one bookmark me

and maybe never...

i am a story

everyone skip me

and will 'till forever...

i am a book

no one every buy or borrow

and maybe never...

i am a thought

no one think about me

and maybe never...

  

and im thinking

how it feels like remembered?

i cant get a spark

and maybe never...

you know how?

or will i get it ever?

Author's Note

thanks...

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Insightful piece. I love the ambiguity and the tease. ;) Anyway, I'm just wondering if the disagreement of the subject and the verb in phrases like "no one use me", and "everyone cross me" is intentional? Other than that, I like this piece a lot. Good write, Glitch! :x

[Laminators Dubai]

as a line everyone cross me....get it?
sorry i write a little bit cozy....
thanks...and im glad you liked it^^

[smilempsn]

Our whole life spent in two thoughts... will something will last ...NEVER or FOREVER...
hmm nice thoughts Glitch...

[Baby Ricochet]

If it makes ya feel any better glitch I didn't forget you. Fun poem

[Laminators Dubai]

it does feel better....thank you so much^^ BR

[Jon Roggie]

Nice write. I think you have words remembered!

[Laminators Dubai]

looks like so...good for me.
thanks jon^^

[Nirego]

I really liked the simple imagery, yet you somehow managed to pack a fair whack of heartache and loneliness in there.
The grammatical and spelling errors have been picked up before, it's understandable and I won't labour it; however, I think a further suggestion would be to try and implement your theme throughout, because you lost it half way through:

...never
...forever
...never
...forever
...never
...forever
...never
...never
...never

I would have like the never/forever complimentary contrast to continue.

I also agree about the title; while the link is there, it doesn't fit with the feel of the poem. Perhaps "Forever Never Noticed" or some other play on the content would be better?

Just my thoughts, 'tis all.

Nevertheless an interesting and thought provoking piece. Well done.

[Laminators Dubai]

yeah...it help...and you guys just dig me out. ..thanks for that...
and I'm very happy you liked it nialligimino.

[Nirego]

We're all learning. Keep up the good work.

[Laminators Dubai]

yes...I love to learn but I hate study.

[Nirego]

A lot like me then!

[Laminators Dubai]

haha........yes at least in something cool ^^

[Prritiy]

you thoughts you have put across but there was distraction, the grammatical errors, a suggestion double check or have it checked by someone who is good at grammar, poetically changed grammar is ok or a word or too happens due to human error but too much is distraction and puts the composition in bad light.
I hope you understand it and take it positively. :)

i am word
no one uses me
and maybe never...


i am a line
everyone crosses me
and will 'till forever...


i am a page
no one bookmarked me
and maybe never...


i am a story
everyone skips me
and will 'till forever...

i am a book
no one ever bought or borrowed
and maybe never...

i am a thought
no one thinks about me
and maybe never...

and I'm thinking
how it feels like being remembered?

i can't get a spark
and maybe never...

you know how?
or will i get it ever?

just corrected the tenses.... after right tenses you can reconstruct the lines accordingly :)

best wishes

[Laminators Dubai]

ok i'll do it and thanks for making me better^^ i actually need that....

[Prritiy]

you are welcome sweety :)

[N.A.]

I can feel the alienation and I like it.

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks na
at least you think that its a good one.

[Laminators Dubai]

others just ripp me off for writing this...

[N.A.]

Well, they're just trying to help. I understood it. I think that's all that matters.

[Laminators Dubai]

someone said that I'm not giving my 100% .......?
I guess there is a time to help and a clam way to help....

singing like a bee for others...

[N.A.]

I can see how someone can think that. I think you just don't take your self so seriously and people can tell. Poems don't always have to be serious. Although people like reading poems about pain and suffering.
Maybe your 100% is this: fun, silly, sometimes crazy or nonsensical and misunderstood? :D I don't know.

[Laminators Dubai]

Yup
that is me...and I'm gonna let shine myself...no matter what!^^

[Laminators Dubai]

my always crazy!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Glitch - This one has a bit more contrast for the first...Good to read your work…Thanks for the invite to read your thoughts to paper at Writers Café...I'm back to work with copy writer and doing my best to write 1000 words a day...and a subject you do not get to choose...will be busy the next few months...so I will read all RR"s might just take a bit longer to get a review...hope you understand...plus promote my book: The Onyx - Vena Amoris...for late next month release…I have very little time on my hands…making the most of everyday and taking today to read as many as I can…keep writing and sharing your creative talent here and elsewhere…

[ferousfinite]

I love the dialog... I suggest that you put it into a format. Its missing structure. Do this and it will be complete =)_

[Laminators Dubai]

yeah,
but i guess i should try not to play with this....im already sick of my writings..........

thanks! glad you liked it!

[Vivek K. Tiwari]

Simple one..... nyc . But i couldn't find the title doing justice with the poem .

[Laminators Dubai]

words, line, page, story, book...all linked to the paper....all on the papers...
and its not your fault ...i think third way...and write a lot cozy.

but thanks vivek! ^^

[Vivek K. Tiwari]

oh ... thanks . Now i get it . thanks .

[Laminators Dubai]

i know you will...Im a master in proving....XD

[Vivek K. Tiwari]

hmmm ... I just get a glance of that .