MANAGED

eyes to see

and human to be

trees for us

but we just discussed 

thats all

we are perfectly MANAGED

and we are the Best

then why do you fail?

why do you cry?

why is your skin is pale?

you think its the End of this tale?

no!

it cant be!

because to end it

at least we have to start.

Author's Note

THANKS FOR READING....

Reviews

[ferousfinite]

'Imperfectly Managed - Part 2'

"Our eyes to see
A human to be
The trees are for us

but we just discussed
all perfectly managed
If we are the best

then why do you fail
why do you cry
why are you pale

you think its the End of this tale
no it can not be
because it must start."

The Age of Man is merely the ability to take what is available and make it better. Not that I am better than you or that I am a man, but in this day and age, take hold of what's in front of you! When you write - be the clay!

When I see a piece of writing that speaks to me, but looks like a starving child, I feel compelled to foster it and revive it and embellish it. There are tools for writing, many at best. To learn is to activate and implement. Put your mind into gear and use the tools available to you. Create every piece of writing a final draft with basic format and structure ruling.

[Laminators Dubai]

So sorry friend u_u
i didn't mean to disappoint you with my immaturity...i know immaturity not the right person for this k
job...
Thanks for helping me out...and clear the wind...

[Laminators Dubai]

I will try to do best next time...and get my hands out of such unmanageable write.

[Nirego]

If you return, Glitch, to clear the air, I think ferousfinite was referring to the "broken English", which can affect flow, meaning, and enjoyment. It's not a problem, this is a journey after all is said and done and we are all here to learn from and experience each other.

[Derek Smith]

wasn't to bad. interesting flow to it thanks for the share

[Laminators Dubai]

yup
at least i can let it flow
thanks you so much! ^^

[SyberRose]

So true...nicely penned...enjoyed reading...Rose

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks rose.... : )

[Sami Khalil]

Cute , wise...:).........

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks sami..... : )

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Ren Black]

Good write with an interesting concept.

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks you so much! ^^

[Akshay Rawal]

Nice one gitch...perfect rhyming and a very austere and serene wordplay....i am not that good at rhyming
but still have begun to love poems.....quite energetic....and see if you can correct " why is your skin is pale?" i think the latter 'is' is either 'so' or just an unnecessary syllable......Thanks and keep sensitising me of your new works....

[Laminators Dubai]

sure i will...thanks for reviewing.... : )

[Avinash]

That is deep philosophy presented in the cutest way :)

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks....but why cute?

[Avinash]

Because I found it Cute for its freshness and energy ..and ur signature Rhymes :)

[Laminators Dubai]

oh thanks! : )

[MikeV]

Nice one Glitch! :) i loved those ending lines

[Laminators Dubai]

yup
i just want to use these words...
thank you so much!