MANAGED

eyes to see

and human to be

trees for us

but we just discussed 

thats all

we are perfectly MANAGED

and we are the Best

then why do you fail?

why do you cry?

why is your skin is pale?

you think its the End of this tale?

no!

it cant be!

because to end it

at least we have to start.

Author's Note

THANKS FOR READING....

Reviews

[ferousfinite]

'Imperfectly Managed - Part 2'

"Our eyes to see
A human to be
The trees are for us

but we just discussed
all perfectly managed
If we are the best

then why do you fail
why do you cry
why are you pale

you think its the End of this tale
no it can not be
because it must start."

The Age of Man is merely the ability to take what is available and make it better. Not that I am better than you or that I am a man, but in this day and age, take hold of what's in front of you! When you write - be the clay!

When I see a piece of writing that speaks to me, but looks like a starving child, I feel compelled to foster it and revive it and embellish it. There are tools for writing, many at best. To learn is to activate and implement. Put your mind into gear and use the tools available to you. Create every piece of writing a final draft with basic format and structure ruling.

[Laminators Dubai]

So sorry friend u_u
i didn't mean to disappoint you with my immaturity...i know immaturity not the right person for this k
job...
Thanks for helping me out...and clear the wind...

[Laminators Dubai]

I will try to do best next time...and get my hands out of such unmanageable write.

[Nirego]

If you return, Glitch, to clear the air, I think ferousfinite was referring to the "broken English", which can affect flow, meaning, and enjoyment. It's not a problem, this is a journey after all is said and done and we are all here to learn from and experience each other.

[annie lee]

This is a very nice thought well-expressed.

[Laminators Dubai]

well thank you lee.....im glad you liked it....^^

[Jennifer Rai]

Nice Read. Great penning.. loved it

[Michael G. Smith]

My wife's skin isn't pale. We were made to make mistakes so that we could learn. If we don't learn we can't progress spiritually and one day be like our savior.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

"because to end it at least we have to start." This speaks a lot. What a good way to end this piece. :)

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks you so much! ^^

[Dreamer]

Nice work, I enjoyed the wording of this poem

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks you so much! ^^

[Dreamer]

You're welcome!

[Saumya]

interesting ideas and well crafted:)
an enjoyable read:)
well done:)

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks you so much! ^^

[Saumya]

you r welcm dear:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting read. Good job glitch

[Laminators Dubai]

thanks you so much! ^^

[kublakhan27]

I loved the first two lines and the last two...well I loved the whole thing but the beginning and ending are really great...this one made me think a lot...I feel like there's room for interpretation with this one...it struck me as an assessment of humans within the context of nature but there seems to be many possible contexts here...great work :)

[Laminators Dubai]

yup
its painful....for the next gen.
thanks you so much! ^^

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Gives for an interesting read here...Glitch...did you want that one line to read as followed:

why is your skin is pale?
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why is your skin pale?

thanks for the invite...many rr's today...I hope I can read them all...

[Laminators Dubai]

sure i can do that..
thanks you so much! ^^

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...write on...

[Akashi]

Creatively written. You have an amazing imagination.

[Laminators Dubai]

thats right!
at least you gotta imagine.........
thanks you for your words..^^

[Akashi]

You're welcome. :)