Glitter's...

good peoples ashes compared to glitters...

They say,

you are gone now,

but can i believe them,

can i, how?

they say,

its just you ashes,

in this beautiful pot,

i will not name it,

this will hurt me,

a lot!

you still made me shine,

i can feel you

next to mine.

for them its ashes,

but still,

glitter of mine...

Author's Note

I am cold now...
i never had a moment to use these words....and i wish i will never use them...
but here i am...

hope you have a nice read...

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

I hope I'm glittery in the afterlife cause I'm sure as hell not glittery in this life.

[Laminators Dubai]

ha ha ha...once i said that and my mum....she hit me for that....and said...you are not you...you are my daughter...
people love us man...
love ya.....^^

[smilempsn]

Dark and sad piece.. Different from other work of yours..

I loved how the sentiments took the peak and ended in this piece..
'you still made me shine,
i can feel you
next to mine.

for them its ashes,
but still,
glitter of mine...'

[Laminators Dubai]

glad you like it....^^

[smilempsn]

Yesh I did ^-^

[Marie]

. I lost my third husband, and his ashes are in an urn in my house now. I know what you're talking about.

[Laminators Dubai]

ok....3 is my lucky number...just so you know....
you know the pain much better that me....i never lose someone like that ever...
me and my mum...we were talking about jawaharlal nehru and rajiv gandhi...
and im a bigg fan....
so words come up....like that...im glad you came here....and read me..im happy about that....^^

[Izabe143]

This makes me think if I lost my dad this is how I would. I really love it and I'm to sad don't worry I'm not sad at all he's still with me but he's in the military so it makes me think how long.

[Laminators Dubai]

ooh ok
thanks for commenting....^^

[Inda]

Quite different from your other works, full of emotions and longing. Great piece!

[Laminators Dubai]

yeah...it is...but i cant help it....glad you liked it...^^

[Saumya]

this was really sweet....

i could relate this with my grandmother, whom i sadly dont have with me anymore....
she was the glitter of my life, now turned to ashes...and i feel the same for her now as you stated

they say
its just you ashes
in this beautiful pot
i will not name it
this will hurt me
a lot.!!

and the last stanza
just says it alll that even the further lines couldn't explain...

loved reading it dear:)

[Laminators Dubai]

i wont say im glad by that....
but thanks......^^

[Saumya]

why Glitch?

[Laminators Dubai]

made you sad...i dint want to do that...thats why i never write sad...

[Saumya]

no dear..:) its okk...at times writers write long lines, but that never creates emotion in the reader, but it is the one written by heart, one some words, say a lot...and that's the art:) so it was a compliment for you..:)okk? :)

[Laminators Dubai]

ay ay captain! ^^

[Saumya]

lol...n ur welcm:)

[Sami Khalil]

"you still made me shine,

i can feel you

next to mine.




for them its ashes,

but still,

glitter of mine..."
Some beautiful sentiments in this lovely poem...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Laminators Dubai]

its fine im glad you like it.....^^

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Scott S]

A very heart felt poem, Glitch. I enjoyed it very much.

[Laminators Dubai]

.....thank you....^^

[Kevin Dean]

It's a beautiful poem. Contest material.

[Avinash]

People can only hurt your image, the real you is always the same, immortal, pure and true. Only challenge is to realize it.

[Laminators Dubai]

yup thats right....
thanks....^^