not gonna rhyme...
A Poem by Laminators Dubai
 *ORACLE*
you are gonna smile in a minute and you will not review a glitch... 
happiness you see around,
a nerd kid waiting for school bus,
race of life you will win,
shine like a star in this sky,
have you ever feel that?
i did,
thats another reason to smile,
and rhyming was hard,
so i didnt...
a glitch
© 2013 Laminators Dubai
Author's Note
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like it?
really?
than dare to review!
its a fab!
hope you enjoyed!
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lol, it's awesome, i think it's belong to your life...lol nice write you made, everyday you get up and ready for a school and so on... get the school bus like this....... you just dropped your feels what you feel about life and your daily time.. lol
well penned.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
actually i cant go to school, but i really enjoyed my route of school, it was beautiful, and full o.. read moreactually i cant go to school, but i really enjoyed my route of school, it was beautiful, and full of life, but yeah....its my life...........
thanks for commenting ^^
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11 Years Ago
yeh, i've got the true feelings that came right from your heart what you feel at the moment of going.. read moreyeh, i've got the true feelings that came right from your heart what you feel at the moment of going school :P
Your welcome :)
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Poetry isn't all about Rhyming Glitch and you have proved that with this lovely poem you have so wonderfully written.
It's all about thoughts and emotions... and this shines through brightly in your poem...
Be proud... this is a wonderful poem...
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
im not anti rhyming...its just a joke ...
thanks for coming commenting and love ya! ^^
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It's a blasphemy not to rhyme . :) ..well rhyming means there is too much of kindergarten still left in you. Not that I am against. A poem is what sets your soul free...and this one did pretty decent job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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it is true that poetry does not need to rhyme and you make that point very well here...I myself find it almost impossible NOT to rhyme...but maybe I am just old fashioned,,,I do write for kids mainly so I can get away with it I suppose
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
ok
thanks! ^^^
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This is easily one of my favorite poems of all time!
I love it! Keep it up :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
never had these words before...^^
im glad and im smiling....BIG ONE...^^^^
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I shared a poem for the novel I'm writing (I write poems in my novels, which gave them more meaning) to my 11 year old niece, and her first words were "It doesn't rhyme." I couldn't help it but laugh, and I told her that poems don't need to rhyme, nor do songs. So, you have a good point with this one. Poems don't need to rhyme. Awesome job, girl!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
than i guess i have a 11 year old brain...lol
really...first thing i notice in a poem is rhym.. read morethan i guess i have a 11 year old brain...lol
really...first thing i notice in a poem is rhyme...
but i just wanna give a smile....
thanks!
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11 Years Ago
It's called Free Verse, when a poem doesn't rhyme
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11 Years Ago
ooh...thanks!
i didnt know that....or i forgot....ha ha ha...
thanls for the bonus! **.. read moreooh...thanks!
i didnt know that....or i forgot....ha ha ha...
thanls for the bonus! ******
^^
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Ha, very nicely said; I like what I---oh, read deleted!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
read deleted?
thanks for coming and reviewing!
^^
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11 Years Ago
Well, I didn't want to rhyme with 'said'; bad joke on my part; I don't know what I was thinking; onl.. read moreWell, I didn't want to rhyme with 'said'; bad joke on my part; I don't know what I was thinking; only I could come up with such a stretch on the subject of your excellent poem!
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11 Years Ago
ooooooooooooh ooooooooook
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11 Years Ago
See; I KNEW it was funny!
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haha, very random thoughts huh? You seemed to just type as the pictures appeared in your bubbly mind.
i like! And just so you know, i just loooove dares! ;)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
its not really random.....
its the way i think....
but thanks! ^^
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11 Years Ago
i meant 'random' in a good way. i was referring to how you 'structured' the piece (if that's the ter.. read morei meant 'random' in a good way. i was referring to how you 'structured' the piece (if that's the term i should use.)
I'll carefully select my words next time. ;)
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11 Years Ago
no no no
i was just kidding and didnt tag it with lol...
say what ever you feel
.. read moreno no no
i was just kidding and didnt tag it with lol...
say what ever you feel
i also welcome criticism....just so you know....
love ya....^^
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We smiled but couldnt help reviewing, this was a smart little poem! ^^
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
ha ha ha...
love you
thanks!
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It's cool, short and to the point.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
but i write it without point
kidding
thanks....
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Added on September 5, 2013
Last Updated on September 5, 2013
Tags: glitch, rhymeing
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Laminators DubaiUnited Arab Emirates
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