Make believe

What's beneath your disguise? Do you run from the rains?

   Make believe

   She prides a happy marriage.

   Just this morning the rains fall heavily

   Probably in anger at the lame disguise

   they wash off her make-up.

 

   What do I see? Purple as a lily bruises

   on that face she dresses with a smile.

 

   As I take a closer look at her body,

   through those misty blue eyes into her hurting soul

   I see many more scars

   at different stages of healing.

Reviews

[Thepensiveplayer]

The character of an individual is truly expressed in this one. I like how you bring me to look inside myself and my different phases in life, both good and bad. The stanza about, "through those misty blue eyes" is very soul-searching for me because a person's real story and feelings are behind their glance. I think the more time you spend with someone allows you to get a better feel for who they are and what their about. Keep writing more stunning poetry. :)

[Glennise Ayuk]

Thanks Corey...always:)

[redalia]

you use such a beautiful language, it's a pleasure to read. the images you create are vivid and filled with emotion. the last part hit me hard, to be honest. beautifully written.
big fan of your work so far!

[Glennise Ayuk]

Thank you Redalia. Glad you like it. In many ways, each of us in their own healing process..

[R.E. Ray]

Glennise, you're a gifted writer. Your ability to convey such powerful emotion, so vividly, in few words, is rare. And, though a dark and sad story, you express so subtly hope at the end. "I see many more scars... at different stages of healing." Humans are incredibly resilient, and even under unimaginable suffering, we find a way to stand and fight. Nice work, again!

[Glennise Ayuk]

Wow! I really do appreciate your review, Robert. You looked at it from a new perspective I hadnt figured out before. I thought i was expressing pity, sorrow, even mockery...bt indeed I see the strength now..The ability to wear a smile, and be anywhere at all on that journey to healing, that's nothing short of strength and hope. Thank you for showing me that.

[Paul Bell]

When the door closes.
You don't know what goes on behind them.
But as you say.
That smile hides a magnitude

[Glennise Ayuk]

I agree
There's so many mountains people carry beyond what we can see.
Thank you sincerely for reviewing, Paul.
Merry Christmas:)

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Ah wow great poem. I think many marriages have both happy n sad times. This is poignant and expressed awesomely. Kudos.


I'm a newbie here, plez do review, comment my first poem here, wud luv to know your thoughts, I'm navigating the site looking for poetic interaction,

[Glennise Ayuk]

Thank you. I'm delighted you find sense in my words.
oh, i guess I can say I'm a newbie too. Writer's cafe is a great place..the eposure to beautiful writing by other people, and the opportunity to share your own work..those are priceless things.
I'm looking forward to reading you.
Thank you again. Merry Christmas:)