A. K. A. F. A. D. Style Series II: Thrilla in Manila

I liked the reference to "Eye of the Tiger"....a fighter going for the one he wants...the "ring girl" (and that is a clever way to describe it!). Lots of references to fighters throughout....like the "Thrilla in Manilla!" Your words are intense and show a sense of purpose. In the rhyming sections, your shortened lines were so effective. This was an enjoyable read, Glen. I liked it. Lydi**

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow Glen. I am so happy I sat down to read this. Once I started I couldn't stop. It had a tempo about it, like a song or rap. I cant put my finger on it but I felt like I wanted to read it fast and not to get through it but to feel the "bounce" as you say. It just had a fantastic flow and some of the repeated lines where great I think. One line I loved:

"Now, you know how Tom Brady’s perfect season catastrophe felt at quarterback."

But mostly because I am a Pat's fan, they are my team and that game was crushing to watch!

Posted 11 Years Ago

its a bliss to entertain... the bouncing beat and the flowing rhythm is really good...
i really enjoyed bounce the most, the upbeat seems like a song...
really the words overflows...
nicely penned...

Posted 11 Years Ago

I must say that you are a man of action; of things in motion! I got physically tired reading your word picture, my adrenylan was flowing! I liked your writing for a variety of reasons but, the mos important being your style being a welcome departure from the patterned poetry that I see being written today. I applaud your work and I am sure that I will be reading about your successes!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Love the repetition and the rhythm here! It's so different than other writings of yours that I have read.

Agree to disagree this verse will hit you and bleed.



Heed to smear blood, sweat and tears.



Shear 7 years of disgrace.



Haste there’s no wasting time.



Find you’re going down like a dime.



Chime the bell get ready to swell.



Farewell, digging deep in the well.



Foretell gut wrenching, teeth grinding and give me a mouthpiece.


As always- such INTENSE emotion.. that's what draws me most to your writing. The raw, intense reality of it. Great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago

I love the tempo! It really grabs hold and propels you along! Great!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Read and enjoyed the rhythm of "Bounce"...and that's how I read it, with a bounce...you sorta of forced me to...Obviously waiting (if not already), to be turned into a song...Perhaps YOU already have the music in your head, seems like you almost have to. A lot of your writes have that beat...that cadence....that rhyme and reason.
Liked the style and form of the write..helped move it along at the right tempo....for me
Nice work...
allen

Posted 11 Years Ago

Lovely flowing write , you kept the rhythm going throughout .

Posted 11 Years Ago

Glen you totally sucked me in this story, it seemed as if it was a game I played,

I felt every detail, every edge, very precise ...
and every move and thought that brought you here.

Nicely done. It keeps me really focused, great to see some of your roots,
Back into this one. You have an unique quill my friend.

- Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago

Not read all, but a few and they are wonderful, loved going through them. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

I find it really cool, to read...the rhythm of your writing is impeccable and whimsical...but what I find most cool, is you embracing the Filipino American Dream...I like how you sprinkled ebonics in your write...lawdy lawdy lol...I find it only American, as well...I use to read extensively, but as I get older I can only read when I have the time, and that's usually online, here, reading other people's writing...I Love it though, because its the everyday person...you wrote your heart out, like you were fighting in the ring, and I truly respect that. I tip my hat to you. Cheers.

Posted 11 Years Ago