I liked the reference to "Eye of the Tiger"....a fighter going for the one he wants...the "ring girl" (and that is a clever way to describe it!). Lots of references to fighters throughout....like the "Thrilla in Manilla!" Your words are intense and show a sense of purpose. In the rhyming sections, your shortened lines were so effective. This was an enjoyable read, Glen. I liked it. Lydi**
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LYDIA - THANKS FOR YOUR TIME...TO READ THIS NARRATIVE...I LEARNED A LOT MYSELF WITH THIS WRITE AND W.. read moreLYDIA - THANKS FOR YOUR TIME...TO READ THIS NARRATIVE...I LEARNED A LOT MYSELF WITH THIS WRITE AND WANTED THE FEEL OF NOT GIVING UP...EVEN WHEN EVERYTHING SEEMS TO BE GOING YOUR WAY AND FALL...THERE IS MORE REASON TO KEEP FIGHTING FOR WHAT YOU BELIEVE...
I liked the reference to "Eye of the Tiger"....a fighter going for the one he wants...the "ring girl" (and that is a clever way to describe it!). Lots of references to fighters throughout....like the "Thrilla in Manilla!" Your words are intense and show a sense of purpose. In the rhyming sections, your shortened lines were so effective. This was an enjoyable read, Glen. I liked it. Lydi**
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LYDIA - THANKS FOR YOUR TIME...TO READ THIS NARRATIVE...I LEARNED A LOT MYSELF WITH THIS WRITE AND W.. read moreLYDIA - THANKS FOR YOUR TIME...TO READ THIS NARRATIVE...I LEARNED A LOT MYSELF WITH THIS WRITE AND WANTED THE FEEL OF NOT GIVING UP...EVEN WHEN EVERYTHING SEEMS TO BE GOING YOUR WAY AND FALL...THERE IS MORE REASON TO KEEP FIGHTING FOR WHAT YOU BELIEVE...
On Bounce... such a fierce, pulsing, driven force of words and heart that simply strike a fire in the soul.... Brilliant table set with extravagant words.
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Craig - thanks for you time and review...I'd like to see this put to music..and said aloud...give th.. read moreCraig - thanks for you time and review...I'd like to see this put to music..and said aloud...give the whole series...all its worth...In the first verse...I wanted to get the reader ready for the main event...and like you said get the pulse pumping...
Quite a few poems here, Glen. I'll come back and take a look at another later, but for today I'll talk about the first one. You have a tremendous sense of rhythm. You repeat many phrases and this rather than loosing focus reals the reader in and I did, indeed, become pumped up.
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Pryde - Thank you for reviewing my work and your time... I wanted to make them with a chorus...like .. read morePryde - Thank you for reviewing my work and your time... I wanted to make them with a chorus...like you see in music...more into rap lyrics...and keep the theme throughout the entire read...and as you say reel the audience in...
there's a good rhyme and rhythm on the pieces. i particularly like "Ring Girl" because of the engaging beat...almost like a rap song. the good rhythm and beat just made me want to look for a rap song that would jibe with it and i actually tried to hum some lines in the tune of the rap song "rocketeer." =).
Thanks for your time...Gabrielle...I do like that number...I wanted to make this Series have that fe.. read moreThanks for your time...Gabrielle...I do like that number...I wanted to make this Series have that feel of wanting to get physical in the lines...not like the first Series...a bit more passive and this one a bit more of a tempo...slowly down and speeding up...so the readers can get into the lines...May be one day this can be put to music accompaniment...I would like to see this 3 dimensional...I will have to hear that rap song now...
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the rap song i mentioned also starts at slow tempo and then speeds up.... that could be the reason w.. read morethe rap song i mentioned also starts at slow tempo and then speeds up.... that could be the reason why that rap song came to mind when i read the piece...
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Ditto...I hear you...there...will check out for sure...
I admire any poet or poetess that can rhyme without feeling forced. You offer a refreshing edge to poetry, it is both modern and charming. I see too many artist on here that write as if they are stuck in a rut. Same syllable count...same rhythm count...honestly, what's the fun in that? I've never had the ability to blend one poem into another, but maybe it's because I can't stay focused on the same topic. My inspiration is all over the place, so I could never pull something like this off. Kudos to you for sharing your art, it is wonderful to read your talent.
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Muse - thanks again...for your time and review of my work...this was a different adventure for me..... read moreMuse - thanks again...for your time and review of my work...this was a different adventure for me...and one night I came up with AKA Filipino American Dream...my alter ego...I did 3 Series so far...and working on a 4th rendition...off limits for now...but when I finish it...it will be available to the masses here at the Cafe...there's enough with the Trilogy for now...
You get the rhythm of this one from the start, reads like a rap song bouncing off the page, and I can dance to it....entertaining, I enjoyed the show.
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Frieda P - that's what I want this type of read to do...get to know the other me...and have fun with.. read moreFrieda P - that's what I want this type of read to do...get to know the other me...and have fun with the whole scheme of things...what's hard...is you have to keep the writings in a theme perspective and go with a whole narrative of a write...I'd like to see this stuff put to music...but I do not think the industry is serious about a writer like me - to go the next level...so for now I will just keep writing them...I enjoy it...and that's what matters...and if the community here at the Cafe has my back...then that's good enough for me...
I enjoyed this but don't know what to say about it lol....I'm hopeless when it comes to reviews. Being from the UK I realize at the end, after reading another comment that I have no clue about the subject matter and read it totally unaware of what it was actually about.
I realize it had a fighting theme to it and I took from it... a strength and never give up attitude...I particularly liked Other-Side of Empty, found it uplifting :) x
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RL - this is the other-side of me my alter ego Filipino American Dream...gave me...a challenge to w.. read moreRL - this is the other-side of me my alter ego Filipino American Dream...gave me...a challenge to write in a different style altogether...lyrical verses...yet got the gist of it...and the write spot on...
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