You have a place of a beloved person in your heart
You feel very emotional and lost when he is apart
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Love and loss...isn't that the crux of this existence? :) Thank you, my friend!
11 Years Ago
Yes,Love and loss-it is the crux of this existence.
Thanks for dealing with life with courag.. read moreYes,Love and loss-it is the crux of this existence.
Thanks for dealing with life with courage and intelligence.
Cooking Pasta will never be the same again, I love, and have felt this very reflection just recently, I am ever amazed by the universal mind. Beautifully executed my friend.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, my friend. I'm glad you could relate to this...well, glad and sad :)
11 Years Ago
yeah...at least we CAN boil water huh? There is that :)
You write lonely so well. I would have penned something like j- here I stand suckin soup out the can cuz you left me all alone....(insert purile expletives here and here especially if they rhyme.) Yup.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Haha Yeah, but yours would have made a much better song :)
That was really good. I love how the first stanzas just described someone making pasta, and how the last stanza explained why. This poem is making me hungry lol.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
By all means...go eat some pasta :) Thank you so much for the review!
I wonder what you might write about, later, if many of your ardent fans here at the WC should suddenly show up on your doorstep some evening; while that water is boiling and the pasta is swimming in those salted eruptions? Of course it's a fantasy but an interesting one I think. What would your face look like upon opening the door? Wide-eyed, innocent, unsuspecting or crazed with fear that the community collective had come to assess the adherence to some unwritten standards of hospitality? How would you remember the evening that wore on - possibly late into a dew-soaked moonlit morning? How would our dear Sarah capture that scene? How might she immortalize the moment and those who yearn to toast greatness and in so doing become a part of history?
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
haha Oh, I think I could probably come up with several pieces of poetry if something like that occu.. read morehaha Oh, I think I could probably come up with several pieces of poetry if something like that occurred. You always make me laugh, my friend!
Dinner alone can't always be seen as a bad thing as often times, it could be a good thing. We get time to ourselves, to reflect and remember certain things. For that evening, the food, aroma and silverware can be our friends, our personal company. Though they wouldn't understand or mean as much to you as your lover probably would, but we wouldn't be completely alone.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I do agree with you...and this was not necessarily meant to be sad or happy, just a reflection. I'm.. read moreI do agree with you...and this was not necessarily meant to be sad or happy, just a reflection. I'm glad you made your own assumptions and felt your own emotions with this one :)
Loved the imagery. It showcased a unique setting where a special dinner for one remained to be nostalgic after the loss of a cherised lover. Great work Girl Friday. Another riveting read. :)
This is, as others have said, masterful at showing us what it is is to be left and alone. You can feel the speaker's longing. And yet it is not overly sentimental. There are no tears streaming or wails echoing.
I like that. It is understated in a good way.
One area where I see a chance for improvement though is:
"one wax steeple with a tongue of fire,"
I love this line. And yet, I wonder if a word or two could be added or changed to further the theme of loss and loneliness. Maybe something about the tongue lapping into emptiness??? It's a great image as is, but it just seems like a missed opportunity in a way.
Regardless, this is very nicely written.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Interesting idea...I shall think on it. Thank you, my friend.
"She's mad but she's magic. There's no lie in her fire." - Charles Bukowski
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