Echoes

we stood inside of possibility,

as mirrored beings gazing into familiar eyes,

            waiting for the right moment

to shake the sable sky with our offenseless hands,

to unlock the stars from their divine bonds

 

and it happened when we touched,

a simple skimming of flesh that brimmed

            electric     and we

became the ash of our ancestry,

the sublime culmination of what had been,

            colliding as wave upon cliff,

until our animation was abruptly defined

 

by the tender blooms of Jasmine

smiling wide beneath a Huntress Moon    

            delicate and small,

as the beads of night-mist     sheltering

our shoulders and crowing our wilting hair

 

we knew the meaning of us

            in our connection to dust,

in the sloshing of water beneath our skin,

because we are more the same

than we are different     duplicate beings

            from the perspective

                                    of paradise

Reviews

[MsJewel]

and it happened when we touched,
a simple skimming of flesh that brimmed
electric and we
became the ash of our ancestry,
the sublime culmination of what had been,
colliding as wave upon cliff,
Your poem is lovely and these words truly took my breath away. A poem sighs were made for!

:) Julie

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, Julie!

[Rocans]

Beautiful poem. These words really are at your poetic mercy. Enjoyed every second of this journey you took me on.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I'm so happy you enjoyed the ride :)

[Ken Simm.]

I think the thing I really enjoy about all your poetry is the intelligent romance and plural energy that seems to prevade throughout. They are never simple they always layer meanings. This is no exception.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you for seeing so deeply into my writing...it is really all that I can hope for. You made my night ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

because we are more the same
than we are different duplicate beings
from the perspective
of paradise

We would do well do remember our sameness and connections. I know this was a romantic love poem but it seemed to speak upon love in general. We are all family. Spectacular write.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much...I'm glad you saw the connection in this one...

[Derek Smith]

once again, done really nice. I enjoyed the flow of it, the words used were awesome to describe and write this

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you Derek! I truly appreciate your words and your time in reading my work :)

[Derek Smith]

Of course I enjoy it

[K. Louis]

love the moment in the last stanza...and became the ash of our ancestry--beautiful line

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, K!

[B-poet]

There was a lot of rich & powerful imagery within this write. It was like you painting a marvelous painting by using the layering of colors technique. Except for this case you were layering marvelous
poetic verses instead of paint. Great work Girl Friday. A riveting read. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You are truly kind, my friend! Thank you :)

[Kleio13]

o so beautiful. Such a write Sarah

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, my friend!

[Jack...]

This poem touched me, though I probably will be totally off on my take, but there is a certain magic here, a soft love is what I see. A tenderness that is felt when two people touch, find that touch lights the heavens, yet there is no dance, no shouting and cheering for this find, it feels expected. "I sat there waiting, knowing all along you'd come, for we are us and there is no other"

Sarah, the fun to me, in reading your work is finding the meaning, that tiny stream that runs underground, peeking above the surface every now and again to give us but the briefest glimpse, then disappearing. And once again I may be way off, but I can feel the love in this piece and it feels wonderful.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I'm glad you felt the way that you did, Jack, and you are never "way off"...thank you! :)

[icelandicblue]

I notice that you enjoy the imagery of stars in your poetry. Imagery, I might add, that you do incredibly well. We are awash with beauty in this life. The connection we share- we are created from the elements and we will all return to dust but it is how we grasp the in between that makes us human. I found the term duplicate beings to be very perceptive.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You are probably correct...I guess I am a bit obssessed with the idea of things that are not of this earth; the sun, the moon, stars, planets, atmosphere, mythology, gods...I think it is my wondering of what is beyond the realm that we can actually see with our naked eyes, you know? I mean, even the stars...we can "see" them, but only as grains of sand, not as they truly are. Thank you for reading into this one, my friend.