Echoes

we stood inside of possibility,

as mirrored beings gazing into familiar eyes,

            waiting for the right moment

to shake the sable sky with our offenseless hands,

to unlock the stars from their divine bonds

 

and it happened when we touched,

a simple skimming of flesh that brimmed

            electric     and we

became the ash of our ancestry,

the sublime culmination of what had been,

            colliding as wave upon cliff,

until our animation was abruptly defined

 

by the tender blooms of Jasmine

smiling wide beneath a Huntress Moon    

            delicate and small,

as the beads of night-mist     sheltering

our shoulders and crowing our wilting hair

 

we knew the meaning of us

            in our connection to dust,

in the sloshing of water beneath our skin,

because we are more the same

than we are different     duplicate beings

            from the perspective

                                    of paradise

Reviews

[Robert L. Franklin]

Another great write, Sarah. You are very gifted.

[Frieda P]

Ahh spirits of the flesh and soul merging and becoming stardust, simply lovely Friday, it's a huge sigh on the page.....

[Richard]

I felt like someone might be standing in front of their mirror on an off day just talking to themself and fixing their hair trying to reassure themself ... of life or love
You're the most reliable and productive and mature writer seriously you're wonderful I mean it :)

[Clara]

The last stanza is my favourite, 'because we are more the same, than we are different'.
Too true. Great write, Sarah.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you, Lola!

[Souladareatease]

O how I Love the Loving touch-This glows Dear Friday- and indeed the twin walks somewhere waiting!!!
Absolute Beauty!!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much...searching for that twin can be daunting :)

[Souladareatease]

indeed...but follow the waves-I have faith in them...they just don't ebb and flow to our will ...or at least in the pattern we think ;)

[Tom]

The coming together of two kindred spirits, so divinely portrayed in poetic terms !

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much, Tom.

[Ed Hart]

ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh...i mean, i mean, i mean your poetry is delicious...the wizardress of ooooos

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You know, coming from you, this review gave me goosebumps...I think I'll quit while I'm ahead :) Thank you!

[Me]

simply wonderful.. really enjoyed :) x

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much for reading, Raven!

[Lydia Shutter]

When two souls meld romantically, physically, totally they are bringing their worlds together. You said that so beatifully "we became the ash of our ancestry, the sublime culmination of what had been" I liked the celestial references in this write....and especially the feeling of two people meant to be....a kismet. Absolutely lovely poetry, Sarah. Lydi**

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you, Lydi...perhaps there is hope that this might be reality someday, huh? We write what we know, and sometimes, we write what we desire to know.

[Astro]

There is a wondrous flow to this one with each line or word creating a beat that carries the reader through the emotion and story. Very nice use of alliteration and metaphor.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you so much :) I'm glad you liked this one...