Between

Between

A Poem by Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

I stay here because I can --

a cat -- camel arched -- on a fence,

too high for the barking dog to reach

 

trees with purple leaves turn to plums,

as day breaks like a tired vinyl record:

jagged and sharp, music lost to the loam

in black-ridged chips

 

aurora sweeps night back under the rug,

while I sit in a chair on a porch with chipping paint --

for right now -- in this moment --

life seems uncomplicated

 

I stay here because I can --

because there is nothing to make me leave,

even if no one has asked me to unpack my bags

© 2013 Girl Friday (Sarah W.)


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I love the stasis of the piece; nothing is quite committed but the peace that resides in the cracks seems to bring a sense of freedom. The descriptions in the first stanza are really memorable. I also loved the vinyl record imagery. As always you are a pleasure to read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend.
You use words as brushstrokes as you paint a scene and a series of feeling, emotions that go with that scene. I find your visual take on writing truly remarkable.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

You humble me, Ken. Thank you :)
I love the repetition,' I stare here because i can". An avenue against those who oppose nature, no reason to pack your leaves before the season is over.
beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.
Staying where life seems uncomplicated is wise. Some people follow drama, even when it does not invite them. I like the laid-back, just hanging out feel of this piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Rita! I'm amazed at how many unique interpretations of this one there are!
Great line about the day breaking like a tired old record, I liked it a lot. The feeling one gets when they just can't seem to pull the trigger and shoot off from their comfort zones to find adventure in the field of dreams is a great idea to express. My advice, if the bags are packed and you can't seem to leave all alone, ask a 'friend' to go with you into wonderfully beautiful places that paint the backs of your eyes and beg to become a reality. Another well expressed moment/thought in your style which is so apropos to tranquil considerations of life, love and the desires of a woman in the 21'st century.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

You always write such great reviews, my friend :) This was a piece that came to be after thinking o.. read more
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11 Years Ago

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I like the last stanza the most,
" I stay here because I can --
because there is nothing to make me leave,
even if no one has asked me to unpack my bags"
Tranquil and at peace with your own company, yet a subtle undertone of, it would be nice to have someone else here with me. Nicely written, very intriguing.


Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Cairo!
There was a nice simplicity to this one--but it didn't take away from the layers. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece...the in between is felt.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you K...sometimes things just need to be simple, you know. Though, as you said, there are alw.. read more
Interesting....a place to rest...impermanent...a waystation for a singleton who wants to be a pair, but has started to appreciate being unencumbered. I like this. P.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Pete :)
I loved the cadence of your words, Sarah. Their offering was warm and welcoming, like a homecoming.

Always a delight to read you!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Kelly.
I stay here because I can --
because there is nothing to make me leave,
even if no one has asked me to unpack my bags

I find this last stanza the most intriguing. A rare moment where one's own company is enough, but, of course, having someone to join you would be all the better. Love the atmosphere on this piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Pryde :)

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