I love the stasis of the piece; nothing is quite committed but the peace that resides in the cracks seems to bring a sense of freedom. The descriptions in the first stanza are really memorable. I also loved the vinyl record imagery. As always you are a pleasure to read.
You use words as brushstrokes as you paint a scene and a series of feeling, emotions that go with that scene. I find your visual take on writing truly remarkable.
I love the repetition,' I stare here because i can". An avenue against those who oppose nature, no reason to pack your leaves before the season is over.
beautiful
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.
Staying where life seems uncomplicated is wise. Some people follow drama, even when it does not invite them. I like the laid-back, just hanging out feel of this piece.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you, Rita! I'm amazed at how many unique interpretations of this one there are!
Great line about the day breaking like a tired old record, I liked it a lot. The feeling one gets when they just can't seem to pull the trigger and shoot off from their comfort zones to find adventure in the field of dreams is a great idea to express. My advice, if the bags are packed and you can't seem to leave all alone, ask a 'friend' to go with you into wonderfully beautiful places that paint the backs of your eyes and beg to become a reality. Another well expressed moment/thought in your style which is so apropos to tranquil considerations of life, love and the desires of a woman in the 21'st century.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
You always write such great reviews, my friend :) This was a piece that came to be after thinking o.. read moreYou always write such great reviews, my friend :) This was a piece that came to be after thinking on the past, actually, but then I brought it into my current mood as well. I guess the last line is really the "giveaway" in this one. Thank you for reading!
11 Years Ago
You're so welcome, my reviews are only reflections of the quality art I come in contact with. Kudos.. read moreYou're so welcome, my reviews are only reflections of the quality art I come in contact with. Kudos to you Sarahfor another great ine.
I like the last stanza the most,
" I stay here because I can --
because there is nothing to make me leave,
even if no one has asked me to unpack my bags"
Tranquil and at peace with your own company, yet a subtle undertone of, it would be nice to have someone else here with me. Nicely written, very intriguing.
There was a nice simplicity to this one--but it didn't take away from the layers. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece...the in between is felt.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you K...sometimes things just need to be simple, you know. Though, as you said, there are alw.. read moreThank you K...sometimes things just need to be simple, you know. Though, as you said, there are always layers, and though something may seem simple on the outside, there is usually something deeper beneath. Thank you for always being one to look deeper!
Interesting....a place to rest...impermanent...a waystation for a singleton who wants to be a pair, but has started to appreciate being unencumbered. I like this. P.
I stay here because I can --
because there is nothing to make me leave,
even if no one has asked me to unpack my bags
I find this last stanza the most intriguing. A rare moment where one's own company is enough, but, of course, having someone to join you would be all the better. Love the atmosphere on this piece.
"She's mad but she's magic. There's no lie in her fire." - Charles Bukowski
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