Prologue

She was like the smell of an old book; of fresh grass and vanilla. I remembered the gust of wind racing past her as she walked away, the smell etching itself into every fiber of my being. It killed me. And isn't it beautiful, how your body knows that it's dying from the moment that you're born, yet it does everything in its ability to keep you alive, despite the inevitable? That's how I felt about loving her. Even though we were going to die some day, my basic human instinct was to love her. From the moment I was born, despite the inevitable.

I counted the steps of her 'walk away'. I counted until she was almost out of view. I stared into the horizon of her wake until our sun swallowed the last remnants of her. And just like that, it was over. Just like that, she was gone. Autumn left me with the touch of Winter, and God, did I hate Winter.

Reviews

[613]

This was beautifully written. Just beautiful.

It was poetic, sad & you could tell the narrator loved the woman he talks about. There were a few grammatical & punctuational errors. But other than that, fantastic job. I can't wait to read the first chapter!

- Brittney

[Gio S.P.]

I changed the burp to just one (I had to keep at least one, haha) in the first chapter, thanks to your suggestion and it flowed a bit better, thankfully! Also, whenever you have the time can you point out where the grammatical and punctuational errors are located? I admit that I'm not too good with it. It's something I'm trying to greatly improve. Again, thank you so much! Your words are valued and appreciated :)

[marcus]

very nicely written! I enjoyed it, and what's to come? a good beginning!