Listen

Listen
Listen
Listen

Listen to me talk.
Listen to me cry.
Listen to me while away the hours.
Listen the way I want you to listen

With an open mind and an open heart.
Open arms to comfort me.
I try to be open.
Being open needs reciprocated.

Don't leave me hanging.
The thread might break soon.
Snap.
I'm dropped.
I'm hurt.
I'm alone.

Being open leads to one thing.
It leads to being vulnerable.
Open eyes,
Open fear,
Open tears.

To be left alone
Could leave hurt alone.
Could alone cure all pain.
Not listening could stop me,
Just don't listen to me.

Don't listen
Don't listen
Don't listen

Reviews

[Goodbyeguilt]

We all understand that concept, me more than anyone :op

F**k em all

Thanks for the bodacious read.

Leah x

[Gary H]

I think Paul has written a valid point below. I am very bad at writing for myself and often give way to words that others want to hear. When I do this I find that I'm not listening to what my heart is telling me and I don't feel any kind of progression. Hope you take note of what he says and remember that every word you write will lead to ultimate progression if you keep believing in yourself. It's a good poem that made me listen!

[Paul Grimsley]

it is great to get feedback but i wrote for years before i found places like this where there were like-minded people who would read my work. so while it is good you should always write for yourself and if you get something from it for yourself then it will never be in vain.

[Lady Muck]

What were you trying to get across with the threefold repitition? I took it two ways, first the power of three to convince us simple human minds but also the whole over reasurance undermines certainty thing. So. Do you want us to listen........... or not?

[Ashly Christen]

this was a nice piece
first you want someone to listen
then decide f**k it
dont listen
this i can relate to
everyone wants to be listened to
but we all have our breaking points
and here
you will be listened to

[Cdnsurfer]

Listen to these words, Gillzy: You have a beautiful soul and it takes serious balls to let your voice ring out. You are brave, you are strong, and you're soul is beautiful. I am listening. I want to hear the rustling of wind in your soul, where the sun dances on the chattering leaves. Keep at it. Never forget who you are -- a writer.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is a little voice.

telling you.


that you are beautiful.

and amazing.

and to keep writing.


because one day the world (or at least pieces of it) will listen.

and when that day comes.

you will feel alive.


and then you will be a little voice for somebody else.

hugs hugs hugs
hugs!