Time With You

Cheesy Love! (I wrote this after being with my current beau for merely 3 Weeks - 11 months later, and I just asked him and he doesn't remember it, should I feel hurt? Hehe)

Every second spent with you
Gives a minute I’ll never forget,
Every hour we talk away,
Adds to the day since we first met.

Every moment is precious,
 - All the things that we do. -
All the words that are spoken,
- Even the ones that come from you. -

To find someone who cares,
- Who listens no matter what. -
It’s something that I’ll do for you,
- Whether you like it or not. -

I feel safe in your arms,
- When you’re there nothing is wrong. -
In the dark, we sit in silence.
- Just listening to our song. -

3 weeks spent feeling happy.
3 days we’ve been apart,
3 hours that we’ve stayed later.
3 minutes to touch the heart.

Reviews

[Barry Simiana]

AWWWWWW. okay. ain't love grand? if nothing else, it's from the heart and it's for someone, so who cares. it's still good. don't change it for anyone except you.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Gillian every time I read one of your writings I feel priviliged. They are original in a way that I cannot describe or fathom. Great work sweetie, ---mishel

[Jared Kardos]

Yep. Definately cheesy. So cheesy I can almost feel it harding my veins. Still, doesn't mean it isn't a good cheezy poem. :)

[Alex]

hey don't apologize actually i think this part could stand alone ...

3 weeks spent feeling happy.
3 days we've been apart,
3 hours that we've stayed later.
3 minutes to touch the heart.


I liked it :)

[fangs1111]

i think its sweet :)
u always do write well :)

[Cdnsurfer]

Ha! I love cheesy, Gillzy. This is sweet. So, that's where you've disappeared to. Well, it's all good. No better excuse than love to be away from here. Cheers! Rob

[Helen Woodward]

NEVER be ashamed of words like this...Cheesy? I don't think so! This is a wonderful piece of work, unlike your usual style, but it's good to make inroads and try other genres. A mix of styles can be very rewarding. Stop appologising girl and write some more of these words that convey so much...

[Ismael Rodriguez Jr.]

it's a light refreshing unadorned look at love. yes it's a bit cheesy, but the heart can be cheesy.