No Hugs Today

missing people, exams and friends acting weird...

No hugs today.
-- I am the kitten left 'til last. --
People acting strange.
-- Others stop normality. Fast. --
Missing my girl.
-- My rock. --
Missing my boy.
-- Not my, as I thought. --
Testing me tomorrow.
-- The flames of failure loom high. --
No way to drown these sorrows.
-- For to drown them, I would die. --

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

You wouldn't die! This is dark and dreary, but well-written. "The flames of failure loom high"...Great line *star* go to the top of the class!!! It's the "Testing me tomorrow" thing that leaves your reader a little confused and wondering. If a relationship needs 'testing' then it's not a relationship! Friends always act strange when a couple separate... here's your *hug* from me for today.Good piece of writing xxx

[Up To Beat Boi]

Wonderful poem, sad but still very beautiful.

[RAWR!]

*big eyes*
i think i need to read it a few more times.
i dont know what this emotion is...
i'm getting it from reading your poem.
really brilliant.

[Barry Simiana]

when you are up, you are up. when you are down you are down. this brings tears to my wifes eyes for some reason, and she won't tell me why. she doesn't just cry for no reason. usualklky i have to bop her on the head first with a fry pan.
now way to drown this sorry, for to drown them i would die. you go from singular to plural : this sorrow - drown them. if it were me i'd change it to these sorrows. still scans but make it neat. just my opinion, tho.
great work.

[Nicole Lyn =]]

awhhh! How sad! I'd definitely give you a hug, this was written beautifully.

[Cdnsurfer]

*hugs

Loved what you did with this piece. Strong, simple, effective. The short staccatto lines add to this piece. I hope the resits' went well. I especially liked the line "I am the kitten left 'til last" which really sums up the emotion. I also love the strong sense of foreboding with the ending. Ouch. Well done.

[E. J. Gette]

I just love your short and feeling poems. This one is my favorite so far. I love the first lines.

No hugs today
I am the kitten left 'til last.

Great use of words.

[Bubo]

A sad day..........and well written all those emotions....so hope you
did well and all is okay now!

[Nathan Strange]

This was sad and melancholic and very effective I felt you breathe as I read it. Wonderful, I can't say anymore. Thanks for sharing this.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Ill hug you :D

[Gary H]

I read this as life being a test even though I appreciate you have an exam looming. This, of course, led to the high emotional impact of the piece. Intriguing and very enjoyable read (not sure if I'm supposed to 'enjoy'!)

I'm sure 'hugs' will follow soon though......