my Coffee My sweet sunrise

Part of this was inspired by the song Barry Manilow - I Was A Fool. written Aug. 6 2014

Chocolate candy

cane whispers.

What about chocolate cotton

candy kisses.

Black coffee with dark

silk wrapped the flavor.

Lonely nights without

your good mornings.

You were the coffee and

my sweet candy in the sunrise.

Why did I let you go

please come back.

 

No sunshine without

you beautiful love.

My black coffee was

sweet with you.

Copyright Kindred poet/ Benita Staebell  McCartney

 

Author's Note

Part of this was inspired by the song
Barry Manilow - I Was A Fool. written Aug. 6 2014

Barry Manilow - I Was A Fool.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You blended this with the words of candy --- chocolate and coffee...and the meanings seems a departure of a someone...as how this unfolds in the scale of things...as I read the lines...the coffee is not quite the same in retrospect as when it was --- with that person...

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Yes you're correct the coffee seems lonely and cold
without someone special to share it with you're quite good at seeing the picture painted in this write. Glad you liked it.thank you for your kind words
and review and comments. I really appreciate it. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love does make everything better, colors are brighter, birds sing sweeter and food taste better.

A very tasty little poem of longing.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you I am glad you liked it. thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it.
Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome, may your Sunday be blessed with love and happiness.

[Raymond Federle]

Sounds like my kind of morning love this!- PAPPY

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you I am glad you liked it. thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it.
Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Frieda P]

Coffee, sunrises, chocolate and poetry, what could be better?!

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

beautiful words I couldn't agree more with you so true my friend. thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Lyn Anderson]

I really like this. It is beautiful. I would suggest one thing, however, and take it as you wish. If you read the line, "why did I let you go" in my opinion it sounds better on one line. It might be a form thing, but I don't think it would disrupt it to much to leave it on one line.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

glad you liked it thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it. a little confused about "why did I let you go" being on one line you mean separate that and please come back line? Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Lyn Anderson]

Sorry, I was saying "why did I let you go" should be one line, in my opinion, followed by "please come back" instead of "why did I let you" and "go please come back" -- does that make sense?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

black coffee can be so cold---life without chocolate...is like a white page of poetry with no writing on it.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Wow beautiful words thank you for your kind words
and review and comments. I really appreciate it. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Alfred Kukitz]

Heartfelt. I want him to come back on the second reading unfortunately the poem remained the same.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you I am glad you liked it. thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it.
Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Lauriegirl]

Gorgeous and so heartfelt. It is such a beautiful piece than anyone would love to read or hear read aloud. Great job

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you I am glad you liked it you're welcome to read something aloud to some one you love of mine I like doing children's poems also I read mine to my son when he was a baby thank you for your kind words and review and comments. I really appreciate it.
Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Dee]

Beautiful, emotional freeverse Benita... love your choice words and the gentle flow. coffee and sunrise, so perfect.... Bravo ...Dee

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Glad you liked it. beautiful words thank you for your kind words
and review and comments. I really appreciate it. I must make a stop to your page and the others as well. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet