Curse you Moon

Sometimes I feel like the moon is staring at me with a wanton disapproval

Curse you moon for the way you look at me,
Oh how I'd like to know what all you see,
Ravenous beast running whilst on the hunt,
Tears my own but now you I must confront,
For is but you that makes me cry this hour,
A chastising gaze my soul you devour,
Why is it you must look upon me so
And shower my face with radiant glow
I fear nothing good can come of this tie,
No not when you make me feel like to die
Curse you moon for the way you make me feel,
For plead now with you to hear my appeal,
Give me but three of the months many days,
Three days of relief from thy mighty blaze
And use thee I will to restore my soul,
That soul that the rest of the month you stole,
Do this for me and I curse thee no more,
Do this for me and replenish my core,
Moon I swear I can look at thee,
No more.

Author's Note

First attempt at writing in iambic pentameter.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Moonlight has never given me negative thoughts, so I found your poem interesting. Moonlight has given me romance, feelings of peace and calm. Here though you curse the moon, but all is not lost. You are bargaining for change. Very creative. I enjoyed the read, the imagery and look forward to reading more from you.

Chris

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

I curse the moon, as one would curse one they love so dearly. I look at the moon as one who looks on a loved one they've disappointed and caught the ire of thy loves eye. These come from a place of love not hate. Just explaining my thoughts, thank you for the kind review glad you enjoyed.

[Chris Shaw]

I did enjoy and thank you for taking the time to explain in more detail your thinking behind the poem. It was interesting to know.

[JessyJacob]

"I curse the moon, as one would curse one they love so dearly." this line is touchy. i know you felt so dearly, but i didnt see with my blind fold, its unvieled now, but still these deep emotions are to be felt, could you make it revealed and feel. Still my heart is wondering how that dear she became to you, you never talked to her. Very emotional i feel about you.

[Weeping willow]

Wonderful write, enjoyable read ;-]

[John the Baptist]

Iambic pentameter was the meter of the great Elizabethan poets, and I admire your resolve in attempting it. As to the moon, I wouldn't take it too seriously. Nobody ever died of moon stroke.

[Kim S.]

Wow, this is so good, love the flow and rhyme scheme through out

[Cherrie Palmer]

Iambic pentameter is such a complex skill. I love reading them and this is excellent.

[M. J. Smith]

I don't believe I have ever heard the moon castigated like that. Personally, the moon has always been a peaceful companion in the night. Well, in any case, it is a well written poem. The meter, resembling a heartbeat, is nicely done. The subject matter is unusual. Yes, nicely done indeed. Thumbs up, my friend!

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

I love the moon and this poem is meant to reflect the sense of sorrow, shame, or disappointment I feel when I look upon her. Like a scorned child to a parent, I'm try ing to explain how I feel I let her down with my life. Perhaps I didn't express the love I feel for her in the poem, and therein lies the confusion.

[M. J. Smith]

My bad. Sometimes things just go right past me. Appreciate the clarification, my friend. Again, very well done.

[Dani]

This is good for your first attempt!

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

Thank you kindly.

[Dani]

Np! I'm new to this website. I was just browsing around earlier and I was trying to find a website where I could just post random journal entries for people to read and enjoy and maybe leave feedback but I don't think this is the right site for that. Do you know of any?

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

This site seems like it would be a good one for that I use it for poem and random monolougues, poetry.com is good too