Sanity

My name's Keris...
What? I'm not playing games..
Its another of a thousand names
Merely used to help me hide
The type of person I am inside
The person you'll never truely see
Cowering there inside of me...

A mirror breaks
And the distorted truth is staring back.
Those broken eyes, 
That broken smile
Darkness seeping out between the cracks. 
A plastic, artificial shell.
So fragile. 

As a tear leeks through, the paint smudges
Mascara bleeds 
Everyone sees
Who I really am. 

Sanity slowly seeps out

Reviews

[Jack Reaper]

theres not alot i can say, for so few pieces leave me speechless. this is one of them. simply beautifully done, the flow, the imagery, the word choice..simply amazing. youve spawned to some inspiration in me even. ill definately be coming back to read more.

"The type of person I am inside
The person you'll never truely see
Cowering there inside of me..."



just wow.

[Franki Valerie]

Thanks so much! :) Shame i can't write like this anymore. Pain comes out in a different outlet now, I'm afraid.

[Jack Reaper]

oh i know that feeling. i wouldnt be able to write "wicked dreams" now if i tried.

[Franki Valerie]

sucks, right? lol

[Frieda P]

I don't know what to say about this, it reveals so much in it's secretive manner...thankfully 'sanity slowly seeps out'....

Nice write.

[Franki Valerie]

Thank you, I'm very grateful for your time ^_^

[Bluefire]

Wow, this poem is amazing. It seams to speak of darkness, sadness, depression, within the protagonist, and once those emotions are set free, insanity settles in.
Amazing write, very dark, I love it.
Well done!

[Franki Valerie]

Thanks so much! :) xx

[Bluefire]

^^ bNo problem.

[zainul]

This is a great piece.
Every word seems to create an image or an action.
Amazing write.

[frivolous treasures]

I definitely felt the emotion roll through your words. Your second stanza was outstanding.

"darkness seeping out between the cracks
a plastic artificial shell
so fragile"

Brilliantly written! This was a chilling and dark verse, one that coldly touches the truth of so many out there...
Marvelous job :)

[Franki Valerie]

Oh thank you so much! :'3

[frivolous treasures]

You are most welcome :)

[khalid]

i dont think your name is that strange! as you said it is one of thousands of names! i have really enjoyed this sad poem with all the images you have drawn as well as the words picking and the flow.