Crucible

 

Sacred words never spoken
Tired tongues twisted,
But wrath was written
And blood boiled
Still words never spoken

Accused innocense
LIARS! LIARS!
Defiant children in abandon
Icy cold, so cold
Saturated words stood still

Feel fright, stand straight
Deliver us from evil!
Inhaling absolution
Final truth revealed.

Reviews

[KUFU]

Trial by fire? Hmmm, great way to tell the trueness of a thing/concept. I like it! This poem reads like an alchemic spell designed to remove a perceived cloak of deception. Though the poem is replete with descriptions of hot displeasures; as I read the poem, I can't help but imagine a "fun", whimsical tone as this spell is cast...but that's just me. Something about spell-casting that just brings out the kid in me.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Intense piece... I feel the judgement hammer swinging as I read this... very well versed... I really enjoyed it.

[Aimee Mahathy]

This was a very enjoyable piece! I loved the alliteration! Sometimes poets can over-do it, but you used it perfectly in this!
I like the sense of forboding, especially at the end. And the contrast of innocence and the darkness of lies~ Wonderful.
Great job!