Black dust

Black dust

A Poem by Georgiana

I was just remembering how this skin
Bandaged once nothing but black dust.
All it contained
Sometimes lying on the harsh kitchen floor
I tried

Nothing petty; nothing dainty
My most honest apologies: I'm not flowery this time
Just layers of black swirled fog
Under the bathroom sink
I tried

The shiny, compact, mirrored top
Black fog would roll down my cheeks
It grew and it grew and it grew. My sleep informed me
On capacious carpet that looked like blended arguments and meaningless
I tried

I hurled up dust at every kiss
So rain, you better hammer the ground.
Wind: shatter my windows.
Thick, grey, mighty clouds: suffocate the entire world
Because I know
I almost died

© 2014 Georgiana


Author's Note

Georgiana
Please let me know if my poetry is powerful. Thank you x

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The emotions are intense, a bit hard(for me) to comprehend where you were going with this, until that last stanza. powerful, indeed it is, and a tough spirit in the face of misery and hard times. Love it, you may like my "Dying every Second" poem. This piece was great and well written, a tad tough to pull the meaning from, but it challenges the reader to put their thinking cap on, and re-read. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Georgiana

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much, it's lovely to hear the effects of my poem. I shall have a read of yours soon



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Such a powerful write. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Georgiana

10 Years Ago

Thank you! I appreciate it.
Without reading your comment on a review I couldn't grasp exactly what You meant , but I did catch the emotional struggle.
The Inner Fight and struggle.
I also saw your strength.
Even though you seem to show how many ways you appeared broken you still pushed on and kept trying.
Then in the end you defied the laws to break you. You stood your ground and told the wind it better smash your windows and the rain to hammer the ground. Come with it's full strength cause you are going to fight till your last breath though suffocating.
You know if you don't fight it could kill you, cause it almost did.
You are prepared to battle to win.

Very very strong and Positive and full of light hiding behind the clouds of grey smoke.
You are your own force and the laws of nature had better take warning that you are no weak or trodden down Soul. You are a Seasoned Warrior.

Well that's' what I saw... and I walk away from it with more courage and strength.
Very nice Job !

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Georgiana

10 Years Ago

Oh wow thank you so much for this review! It really does mean an awful lot to me that you seem to en.. read more
Cryingkate

10 Years Ago

I'm so happy I caught it. Thanks for letting me know.
I am horrible at reviews but I do try wi.. read more
Georgiana

10 Years Ago

Well this is by far my favourite review I have received so far (although I know that's not saying mu.. read more
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ANM
Yes this is hard hitting your use of words is good well done! It sums up illness that eventually kills I think?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Georgiana

10 Years Ago

Thank you! To me, it's about the effects of heavy emotional abuse which grinds one right down. But I.. read more
ANM

10 Years Ago

You are welcome!

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Added on August 26, 2014
Last Updated on September 7, 2014
Tags: Poetry, black, death, dark, love, emotion

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