Black dust

I was just remembering how this skin
Bandaged once nothing but black dust.
All it contained
Sometimes lying on the harsh kitchen floor
I tried

Nothing petty; nothing dainty
My most honest apologies: I'm not flowery this time
Just layers of black swirled fog
Under the bathroom sink
I tried

The shiny, compact, mirrored top
Black fog would roll down my cheeks
It grew and it grew and it grew. My sleep informed me
On capacious carpet that looked like blended arguments and meaningless
I tried

I hurled up dust at every kiss
So rain, you better hammer the ground.
Wind: shatter my windows.
Thick, grey, mighty clouds: suffocate the entire world
Because I know
I almost died

Author's Note

Please let me know if my poetry is powerful. Thank you x

Reviews

[Don't just B, but B ama..]

The emotions are intense, a bit hard(for me) to comprehend where you were going with this, until that last stanza. powerful, indeed it is, and a tough spirit in the face of misery and hard times. Love it, you may like my "Dying every Second" poem. This piece was great and well written, a tad tough to pull the meaning from, but it challenges the reader to put their thinking cap on, and re-read. Well done.

[Georgiana]

Thank you very much, it's lovely to hear the effects of my poem. I shall have a read of yours soon

[Haeshin]

It was hard to understand, really, even after finding out what the poem was supposed to be about.

[I Am Svetlana]

This is stunning! It's never easy to go through so much pain, yet want to keep going, but I'm glad that you picked yourself up and kept on. Life is a journey and we all have to endure it; the pain, struggles. But fighting builds us up for the next time around. Beautiful use of emotions and turmoil.

[Georgiana]

Thank you very much for this review and for being so understanding, I really appreciate it and am so pleased to know that I managed to convey the emotional struggle.

[wordman]

well it certainly touched me and yes it was powerful we all struggle in life one way or another
you portrayed it well

[Georgiana]

Thank you very much.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. The use of language made me read again. Your words need to be read with a calm mind. You create vision and thoughts with strong description. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Georgiana]

Thank you so much, this means a lot to me.

[Roger Turgeon]

read like 3 suicide attempts...if that's not powerful ...nothing is

[willweb]

This poem is extremely powerful. It is filled with strong emotions and feelings. Very dark as well. I seemed to tense up as I read this and I like when a poem does that to me. I really enjoyed this today.

[Georgiana]

I'm incredibly pleased that it had an affect on you which you enjoyed. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review!

[Sindu]

The turmoil you had to go through it, everytime- I can see it. Through the pain in the darkness created, you stood up, brave enough to face it all, asking for the world around you to give you its best.
This is powerful. This shows the pain, weekness and also strength in it.

[Georgiana]

Thank you so much for being so understanding and appreciating! Thanks also for taking the time to read and review.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think this is very powerful! i like the broken and fragmented thought .. so can relate .. the overall pulse of darkness but no defeat .. and absolutely love the challenging nature of your last verse .. i really like this .. its refreshing and unique .. came to read at Cryin' Kate's request and I thank her for that! i am off to read some more of you .. so nice to meet you :)
E.

[Georgiana]

What a lovely review! Thank you very much, I really appreciate it. I'm incredibly flattered that cryingkate has suggested my poetry to you. I'm new here so haven't posted much yet (as you've probably found) but I have written lots of poetry in the past so I'll be sure to share them soon! Can't wait to check out your stuff! Thanks again :)

[A. Amos]

Deep, profound and yes your poetry is powerful, my friend cryingcate brought me here; thanks to her.

I like and enjoyed reading, as I felt your spirit in words...bravo!

[Georgiana]

Thank you so much! I'm incredibly grateful and flattered that cryingkate suggested my poetry to you. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend...