Loneliness

My life at times.

Loneliness

 

By

J.M. Gershom

 

I lay in bed with

No one but countless

Thoughts of lonely

Hope.

My mind won’t let

It rest and

My heart stokes

The flames that

Scorches the very

Depths of my being.

I think of her

Constantly and constantly

I drink to forget.

No, not forget, but

To blur the vision

In my mind’s eye.

To try and douse that

Bonfire in my vast

And pathetic soul.

I wish I could purge

Myself  of her,

Her beauty,

Her scent,

Her voice,

Her warmth,

Her taste.

No, I have never

Experienced such ripe

Fruit. I only taste

The last swig of

Whiskey

From a bottle that

Now resembles me.

Empty.

Author's Note

I have thought of her for over a year, but not to worry. I haven't been drunk for a year. lol

Reviews

[brigid]

powerfully written..expresses such depth of emotion as to drag you into its very well of memory and despair...."vast and pathetic soul"... and the last line is a killer! blessings to you

[Jeffrey Gershom]

Thank you again, brigid, for your wonderful words. Unfortunately, the only spirits that were able to comfort me in such dyer times were...distilled ones. LOL! Here in America, this seems to be the "bread and butter" that drives the Country Music genre. Sad to say, that my soul still feels the same... Many blessings to you as well.

[melissa]

so sad but so well written i loved it!

[Ladysue]

A very good write..I could feel the yearning...deep and full of emotion....very well expressed...

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

I have recently been dumped and this poem makes me really connect with the emotion that you have expressed I too felt empty and this type of poetry will be written for years to come I especially found the thinking of her beauty her voice and her warmth relative
It was a really well written poem

[benjaminhayes]

Great poem. Very well done, the imagery is fantastic and paints a really strong picture of what it is like to be longing for someone.
I especially the final metaphor of the empty whisky bottle resemble yourself.

[OT]

oh the deep pain - hints of anger and remorse all combined together!! (and I'm glad you haven't been drunk for a year haha) - I liked the idea of purging - creates the notion of an addiction! nice!

[KAREN]

Excellent write! I could feel the pain and loneliness ! Love how you ended! We all feel empty from time to time. great job!

[Greg Skura]

This is really very good! It is amazing how someone can awaken the vast love within our hearts and when they go we feel this incredible longing to be once again full.
Well Done!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was one deep poem! The words was sad, but written so well!

[Tommy]

This piece speak so clear to the wants left behind when love has departed on its own leaving a heart to drown in its singular devotion to the lost. We tend or I tended to deal in the same way which is to try and drown our sorrow with drink. This is a poem expressing through the depth of meaningful grief, which is in its self one of the greatest inspirations for great pieces like you have writ.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy