Waiting for Seasons to Change

Fuchsia pink blossom surround the trunk, 

Roses smothered in dew.

Silhouettes of our bodies form, 

Being starved by longer days. 

Once dead branches grow green again, 

Magenta, crimson, apricot too,

Seasons change, 

Summer soon follows, 

To Spring we whisper adieu. 

Freshly slain grass lies dead on the ground, 

The chirping of birds, 

Their song once again found. 

Sunlight blinding through the shadow of trees, 

Absence of winds, 

Sets branches at ease.

Buttercups grow, 

Sprouting from the earth, 

The transfer of pollen, 

The miracle of birth. 

Suffocating scent surrounds,

The rain penetrating soil, 

Swamping insignificant lives. 

Dead crunchy leaves, 

trodden into the floor. 

The decaying branches, 

Which stood full before. 

Making way for change, 

Giving into winter, 

Autumn falls as winter arrives, 

It's rival season dominates, 

The air gets sharper, 

The rain descends, 

Fighters die. 

Autumn ends. 

Frozen daggers dangling dangerously, 

In the dead of night. 

Fresh coat of snow, ruined by footprints, 

Frozen to touch.

The selfish hand of humans, 

Desperately making more of their kind, 

Build men of snow, with no hearts to show, 

Turning nature on its own. 

Crisp air swarms lungs, 

That no cloud of breath 

Could dispense.  

The coldness blows over as winter

Slowly...

fades. 

Just as snow settles, 

The air warms, 

The cycle starts again. 

The year begins to rearrange,

As we sit around, 

Waiting for seasons to change.  

Reviews

[Shabeeh Haider]

Strong and powerful use of words. We can actually "feel" what we are reading in this beautiful poem.
A touch of rhyme adds more flavour to your words.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you, i'm very glad that you enjoy my work :D

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Wow! An exceptional and commendable piece of writing. You have penned down all about the seasons in a lovely way- with deep, profound imagery. I particularly liked it when you called humans selfish.
The last lines have been rhymed- rearrange and change. This has adorned your ending.
We all are acquainted with the seasons, but the way you have described the beauty that lies in each is out of the ordinary.
Well-written. Keep writing.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for such a wonderful review :D such good feedback and I hope you continue to review,
read moreThank you for such a wonderful review :D such good feedback and I hope you continue to review,
Regards,
Georgie n

[Spencer Barker]

Georgina, yet again do you prove to your readers the magnificent imagery, style, and organization in your poems. We can all take a travel through a seasons change through this writing and it is quite spectacular. Excellent job!

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you so much,
I hope you continue to read my work,
I'll take a look at yours asap

[MAC]

your writing is certainly a notch above. your style is polished and this particular piece is exceptionally crafted.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for such a positive review, i'm glad you enjoy my work and hope you continue to read.
read moreThank you for such a positive review, i'm glad you enjoy my work and hope you continue to read.
I will take a look at yours as soon as i get the chance!
Thanks again,
Georgie.

[Tinman07]

I really like this... You make the images resonate well, invoking memories for the different senses.
Silhouettes of our bodies form - as our long forgotten shadows return with sunshine.
Freshly slain grass - 'slain' tidying the garden will lose all innocence with this.
Magenta, crimson, apricot - what a lovely change from pink, red or yellow etc, brings it to life with subtlety
Suffocating scent surrounds - I just like well crafted alliteration.
Fighters die - Winter arrives and the last stubborn plants/flowers succumb, autumn ends.

and your sporadic use of rhyme seems to intensify in some way, perhaps it helps us to refocus on the fct these are written words, before you invoke the senses again.

Love it, thanks for sharing it.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you very much for such a positive review. I like that you have picked out specific parts that you like from the poem- helps me to understand what i am doing write in my work and what i should do more of. Please continue to review my work!
Regards,
Georgie.

[barleygirl]

Your descriptions of the changes in seasons are vivid & impactful becuz of your powerful word choices. I love seeing "magenta, crimson, apricot" instead of the simple color names. This is one example of how you've reached a little further to find the perfect way to describe each sensory delight. Your descriptions also include action, so we can see the various seasons & what's happening to signify the changes. This is a very bountiful bucket of imagery.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you, i think the description of the colours is my favorite part of the poem too.
Your reviews mean a lot to me with such analytic skill and i hope you continue to write them for me.
Regards,
Georgie.

[Country boy183798]

Vividly beautiful! I really enjoyed reading it. You have captured the nature so well that it felt as if I could hear and see everything I read. I especially love this bit:
"Freshly slain grass lies dead on the ground,
The chirping of birds,
Their song once again found.
Sunlight blinding through the shadow of trees,
Absence of winds,
Sets branches at ease."
This is one those poems that readers can truly feel as if your words are literally tangible. Well done and keep on writing!

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you so much, i'm glad you found my poetry beautiful and enjoyable to read. Honestly, your feedback means so much me and has put a smile on my face.
I will continue to write as long as you continue to review. Thank you so much :D
Regards,
Georgie x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a show of nature, and an inference of man not appreciating or taking care of it...and if we are not careful we will have no "hearts to show"...and nature will have nothing left to show us.

what we don't take care of decays...that which is around us, as well as that which is within us.

[Georgina Cross]

Hi Jacob,
I'm glad you can take such meaning from my work, it's always nice to hear someone who can interpret the word in their own way without any guidance. You just follow my words and read what you feel and to me that is beautiful!
Please do not stop reviewing, I much appreciate your kind words.
Georgie :)

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Georgie!
Free Style poetry sure bonds well with your pen, to speak in a soft, poetic voice, as smooth and gentle as a lover's breath, and ohhh, the emotions inspired by the ribbons of creativity a'flow, embracing one's senses from spaces in-between your lines, words, and verses … it's as though, with each read, I'm on an ethereal journey, painted by the wonders of your mind, heart, and beautiful soul.
I may seem a bit exuberant, but somethings simply sweep through the spirit, and this is a breathtaking experience for me.
Any artist who selects colours, hues, and textures of Nature as you do, blending them together on their pallet, splashing them across the canvas of readers' vivid imaginations, with the level of skills you possess, is bound to have created a virtual masterpiece of poetic splendour.
Ah, I could go on, but who wants to hear the ravings of a smitten bard's passions?

Let me close by sharing that I've never known the seasons to be so enthralling, and I thank you most warmly and gratefully, Georgie, for making them so … warmest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard


Techy stuff: V1L3, is "our" bodies correct? I love "freshly slain grass" (amongst so much more). V4L1, throw you a "z" in "froen" … LOL! Consider eliminating as many filler "the, etc;" words as possible, to improve poetic moment, ambience, and flow. The way you've used an ellipsis in "Slowly…" to emphasize pace is inspiring, and your spot-on, intermittent rhymes is masterfully done … and, (finally) I am done! : )

[Georgina Cross]

Hi Richard,
Thanks again for another spectacular review, I always look forward to reading what you have to say about my work. I am glad for the helpful criticism and will get to making the changed needed, especially the word frozen (whoops!)
Your words are always so kind and full of encouragement, I truely hope you never get bored of my poetry and continue to read and review as I will with yours.

Thank you again kind Sir,
Georgie.

[Richard🖌]

You're apt to become more quickly bored by mine than I am with yours, but time will tell … you're welcome, Lovely Lady! ⁓ RJ

[Inject Positivity]

I'm a lover of nature, as I live in a town surrounded with nature, we get most of the seasons here... Your poem took me to visit all the roads of different seasons... This is such a beautiful poetry painted by a skilled poet, I'm enjoying your working with words and thoughts... This is inspiring and heart warming and there is a touch of innocence towards nature... As I read more and more this reveals more beauty of poetic charm.... Hats off to you frnd.... Your word choices keep inspiring me...
Note: in the fourth stanza first line is there a 'z' missing in the word 'froen'?....

Regards
Dhiman

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for such lovely comments and I'm glad my work inspires you. Thank you for pointing out that mistake to me, I will fix it right away!
Please, keep reviewing..
Georgie :)