Child Inside

I am not merciful, 

Stubborn confusing. 

A complex mystery. 

It is me. 

The door is open, 

just a little. 

Ajar. 

An entrance to my heart, 

A pathway to the past. 

The door is slammed, 

a child locked inside

protecting a pure heart. 

Fear. Dismay. Expectation. 

Broken. 

Age grows upon her, 

Mistakes, bad choices. 

Suffocation. 

Identification. 

But not all, lost

is Lost. 

Self reliance. 

Self defiance. 

My child will be free.

Swinging the door, 

running the hills.

She will soon become me. 

Author's Note

All grammatical choices are to enhance the poetic effect.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Georgie!
It is Richard, welcoming you to the site and conducting my first review for your poetry, and such a powerfully-truthful and honest poem it is to start with … ribbons of life and learning flowing throughout.
As newborns, it is generally accepted that we arrive with little more than our genetic programming … as life progresses, we observe, learn, and begin to grow in mentality and conditioning from whatever we are associated, forming the basic foundation of personality; especially, during our first few years.
As life progresses, we begin to develop the capacity to think, question, and feel life and emotion in a deeper, more meaningful sense, developing inner sensitivities in the ways outside influences affect us, and so forth — as we grow into adulthood … most of it, though beneficial, is often confusing and detrimental to the manner in which we perceive ourselves and the world around us: Each and every incidence effecting the being we become.
These are some of the thoughts and feelings prompted and inspired by your skilled pen, those aspects of mental and spiritual meanderings the power of excellent poetry has over its readers.
Particularly, I am lifted into the moment with your final verse, and surely by the marvelous mind and imagination you've shared with us, here upon your page.

Thank you so very much, Georgie, and again, "Welcome!" I sincerely hope you'll make this site your home … smiles to you ⁓ Richard


(please, take time for thoughtful commentary on our reviews, and to return the favor with a review of at least one of our humble efforts)

[Georgina Cross]

Hi Richard,
Thank you so much for such a lovely review of my work. I'm glad it inspires said feelings and hope you enjoy more or my poetry when I come to upload.
Every thought, you have picked up on with such a wonderful review and I thank you once again.
I hope to review some of your work soon,
Thanks again!
Georgie

[Richard🖌]

Georgie, you are most welcome, and I again thank you.
It was purely your poem that inspired the words and feelings expressed in my my review.
Yes, I hope you will drop by to read and review some of my pieces, too.
Smiles 'n hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Coyote Poetry]

Our best days are when we know freedom.
"Self reliance.
Self defiance.
My child will be free.
Swinging the door,
running the hills.
She will soon become me. "
The above lines could stand alone. Good to escape and test our world. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jacob Clifford]

This is a very truthful poem with impactful word choices. It felt to me to be very hopeful.

[Lorraine Montez]

I chose this one first. I look forward to reading more. Your profile cites your age, but your words reveal a wisdom of one much older. How astutely you declare "...not all, lost, is Lost". Beautiful form; brave and honest treatment of sensitive subject matter. Your resounding message of the will to hope, also implies the hope to Will...whatever outcome you desire. Thanks for sharing.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for this lovely review. I'm so glad you enjoyed my work!
I look forward to seeing and hearing more of you :)
Georgie

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A commendable piece of poetry, Georgina. It is very engaging and your comparisons are excellent. You have explained very beautifully how one changes as one grows up. Though maturity and better understanding are attained but stress, envy and other such things overpower the angel inside. Good job.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you very much for such a lovely review! All the feedback is much appreciated and i hope you continue to review my work! :D

[Leo]

very deep and thought provoking..I really enjoyed read it..well done

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you very much i am glad you liked my work.
I will take a read of yours, please continue to read mine :D

[Inject Positivity]

Dear, Georgie this is such a thought provoking write, you were telling the mystery of a child which is hidden inside you... This is a very different kind of poetry, I loved your word choices and the thought you have left here for the reader to think.... It reflected as an inner story to me.... And a poet like Richard has analysed your poem then I don't think I have much to say other than giving you a THUMBS UP!!!

As I'm in the process of learning poetry I can feel assured that I have plenty of things to learn from you.... I will make sure to read all your poems whenever you post them..... I'm truly inspired by your work....

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for such a wonderful comment, I am glad you find my poems interesting, I hope you do continue to read and review my work.
Thank you again,
Georgie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the idea of the child inside...the one we left when we lost our innocence or got hurt the first time, the one we wish we could get back...but it is a battle to get back that reckless abandon we once had.

this is super...you really make us think...except for one thing i would leave out...the description...let the reader read as he or she will...this is a deep, thoughtful poem which will allow our minds to roam.

j.

[Georgina Cross]

Thank you for such kind words,
Perhaps I will think about removing the descriptions, thank you for the advice :)
Georgie.

[highonwords]

the child inside, the faith inside - we gotta look after our innocence, if we want to stay young and ageless, not old and still impossible and hopeless - nice write, georgie :)

regards,
steph

[Georgina Cross]

Hi Steph!
Thank you for taking the time to read, and hopefully enjoy my poem. I am also very glad that the key themes in my poem come across easily.
I very much appreciate this review and hope you will continue to do so :)