Haiku's In Spring

A Poem by George Coombs

Attempts to write in this very meaningful Japanese form

Haikus In Spring

gilded in early

spring light grass bows graceful

bending not breaking...

gulls glide in stillness

calling across welcoming

sky this spring evening...

flowers open to

light like true seekers of a

new and better way...

George Coombs

© 2017 George Coombs

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Richard🖌

Nice suite of Haiku, Geroge, composed in the Western rules count.
I particularly enjoyed the beautiful scenery yours words painted onto the canvas of my imagination and upon the emotions and feelings of my heart … a wonderful work, My Friend.
A Note: The plural of Haiku is "Haiku" (as Haikus is in your title), as the plural of geese is "geese", rather than geeses.
Your counts are spot-on, except for V1L2, which could be easily sorted by adding "ly" to "graceful".
If you're interested and do not know (and many don't), there are rather strict rules to this form, included below for your examination:

Haiku
An unrhymed Japanese poetic form recording the essence of a moment. Has a "nature" theme. It consists of three lines of 5/7/5 count, completely without punctuation or capitalization, and absolutely no formal title ... though, a one, two, or three word mention of it's essence is tolerable when timidly placed in smaller letters far above and to the left of the poem proper.
Each line of the Haiku (and the Senryu) must stand alone as its own statement without enjambment; although, it may not stray too far from the ambiance in its other lines, or from the moment or topic of the poem itself.
The first line sets the scene or the mood, the second line describes the scene, and the final line concludes with a powerful or meaningful solution, message, or moment that stuns, surprises, or impresses deeply upon the reader.

scene/mood
meaning/description
solution/message

Whatever, George, I love your creative and imaginative suite of Haiku that touch deeply and whisper softly of Nature and those inspired to greater hope.

Thank you most gratefully, My Very Talented Friend! ⁓ Richard : )