The Sailors Wife

Inspired by "Alone with the Sea" by Hurt.

She held the candelabra
By the window to the sea
In hopes that crushing depths
Had not done and buried me
She lingered by the window
In hopes and dreams she yearns
She often waits and wonders
As the tallow slowly burns

Reviews

[J. Marc]

Very good poem� I particulalrly like the first paragraph for it is constructed like a verse for a drama with a lot of symbols and staging! The topic is also very original for our modern times. The feeling of hope and longing is there, as well as the subtle anguish. I think you do have some talent in staging scenes into words. Really! Thank you!

[xX-tito24-Xx]

Short and sweet, conveys the message beautifully without having so much of the emotional fluff that my pieces tend to have. Well done indeed :)

Some punctuation might help it flow better, but apart from that I can't really think of anything else to add...

Sorry for the ridiculously short review, but there's nothing else that needs to be done to this, some punctuation and it'll be perfect ;)

[Damian Alan Gray]

Very well done, indeed! The drama and emotional impact is reminiscent of early seafarer rhymes, and the one can almost taste the saltwater and hear the lonesome harbor bells. But ... it seems to be missing the rest of the poem. It's almost as though the piece is an excerpt from a longer version. My only suggestion would be to expand upon the piece. Otherwise, you did an outstanding job!

[darkgurl]

This is such a well written piece here, I like this I can see the whole picture, well written.

[El Suplexo]

Damn! Who knew you were so good at this poetry stuff? I'm really impressed, my friend. This is good stuff, very haunting. It reminds me of that Flogging Molly song, 'Cruel Misstress'.