September 23rd.

A small poem dedicated to an angel, who is sorely missed.

The day that changed my life,
As many others heard,
Was the day this sweet child lost his battle,
On September 23rd.
I only knew you briefly,
Though your memory still remains,
A permanent scar across my life
Weld together with joys and pains.
Your heart was your best feature,
Your being, pure and true.
Who knew it was your downfall,
Who know it would be you?
The gods plucked you from us,
Another angel in their midst,
But you still live here, in our hearts,
You're loved, and dearly missed.

Author's Note

This wasn't created for any intensive purposes...it was purely something I wrote in Year 8, to help me come to terms with loosing a friend. It has sentimental value to me, so...be kind. Thanks.

Reviews

[zainul]

It reflects the real love to a little angel who was plucked from your company.
I felt your sentiment and could relate easily with my situation.
Appreciate your creativity at Year 8.
Thanks for sharing.
Love and adore these lines:
"Another angel in their midst,
But you still live here, in our hearts,
You're loved, and dearly missed."

[G.A. Collins]

Thank you for your acknowledgeable review. It saddens me to hear that you can relate, but I don't think there is a soul on this earth who hasn't experienced loss. All I can hope is that by retelling his story, through this poem, he will stay alive in our minds and hearts. Thank you for reading and leaving such a kind review.

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
I appreciate your compassionate words for my case.
I completely agree with you that there is no soul on this earth who hasn't experienced loss.
Your poem may be a great consolation for all who experienced such loss.
Thanks for being so sympathetic.

[Ruth]

This shows how much the pain lingers but with understanding, beautiful emotion displayed throughout and in such concise form, beautiful! x

[Vile]

Hm, a simple, straight forward piece. I don't usually take to reading things of this nature, however I found myself enjoying it. You do very well at displaying the emotion of the piece and invoking it in the reader. I look forward to reading more from you, well done. :D

[G.A. Collins]

I understand that completely, and that makes me more grateful to you for reading this. I'm just so relieved that people have seen at least something worthy in this, and it means a lot to me, so thank you so much.

[Vile]

No problem. If someone reads my work, I try to return the favor. :D. And if I like their writing it makes it much easier hahaha.

[V]

A very well-written piece, emotional, story-telling with a good rythm to follow. I enjoyed reading it though it carries a sad message.

[G.A. Collins]

I'm so touched by the mere fact people have taken their time to read this piece, and say such kind, understanding things on top. It feels so liberating to be able to express the simple facts of the matter, and to know people are enjoying it at the same time.

[Dan Fite, Jr.]

This was so good....like really really really really good! Emotion is for sure in there, and the heart is there, and heart makes the best poems :) I loved it!

[G.A. Collins]

Thanks! I wasn't aiming to make anything to complicated; just something short, simple, and precise...I'm glad you liked it. It means a lot.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I like those writes with sentiment... gives the true meaning behind the writer... they can let out the words without force... effortlessly like breathing... this has the content of a memorable moment... and a lasting effect to those who read the lines...

[G.A. Collins]

I'm so grateful for all those who have read this, and even more for those who have reviewed it, but your comments mean so much more...the events of loosing my friend played a huge part in changing who I am today, and I've never been able to express the simple facts of the matter until now without feeling like I just can't do it. I'm so grateful that you see the importance of this piece for its sentimental reasons, and I'm ever so thankful that you posted; it feels supportive...thank you.

[KittyPryde99]

That's beautiful. It's quite simple, but still manages to capture the emotion really well. The whole poem has a really simple, powerful message, especially the ending. I loved it!

[G.A. Collins]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review, and I'm glad you liked it. I didn't want to stray into a complex or intricate textualisation, because the reality of the situation was plain and simple in itself. It was just a way for me to combine the facts of the matter, and just say them. I'm glad you could see that.