a drunk poem

I was actually drunk when i wrote this to a guy i was in love with, needles to say it didnt work out lol :D

I want your rough hands all over my soft warm body I want to be your partner in crime I want to show you every thing 

Ill be there throught out time, when your old and gray making you laugh every step of the way. Ill always fight for what I

want fighting is all  I know how to do, count to 10 ill be back again, im fierce like a lion delicate like a flower im

something no one will ever know. Keeping you on your toes. I cant believe I made a rythem im drunk as hell cant even tell

time, but here I am once again wishing you a happy ending to your never ending life story, I hope that you some day see

everything that I can be, soft as an angel lips. sharp as a demons horns careful though check again see what is

underneath, I have never been been afraid of death no human can

com-peat with the beast that lies underneath my skin, the chase, howl of the wind I dream of it, and

freedom I crave so bad, it beats in my skin deep in my vains I can right a poem or kill a man all depends, a fight against

me is a fight no man can ever win, filled with greed and hate you find there weakness and then you kick them while

your down im your angel im a beast you should take the time to find out whats really underneath.

Author's Note

I did actually write this while i was drunk, to a guy i was in love with at the time hahah not that bad for a drunk poem. i would love your comments!

Reviews

[gabrielle]

Very raw and i am loving it. They say that when one is drunk, he/she loses inhibitions, which means that whatever we write on such state everything is all about our feelings. I enjoyed this.

[Chris]

The trick isn't in having "feelings" when you're drunk ...it's admitting to having them when you're sober.

We all look for a person to "share" our walk... sometimes we even find one

[bikergirl3636]

i admitted it when im soober lol i sent him the poem

[bikergirl3636]

sober* lol oops

[Chris]

good heart...

[A. Amos]

I think you should write when drunk:) this was magically good write and truly enjoyed the read...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

As for writing this while intoxicated...
gives the work a real & raw feel...
goes straight to the senses and gives the understanding much more to the reader...
as for the misspelling...
(I did read your bio --- before this poem...so I understand why its there...)
actually works in your favor here...
since this was written while under the influence...

[bikergirl3636]

(thank you for reading my bio)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[Roger Turgeon]

I think it expresses the fact that you know yourself better than anyone else ever could