UNREAL

Another of my song composition. . . What'd ya think ?

I.

Look at me straight in the eyes

And see my world behind

Give it a little more time

And see the pain inside

Feel just a little of mine

So you would understand just why

Listen to my heart, it says,

"I'm always there, you were just blind..."

Bridge:

You're the numbest I have known

You never feel what I have felt

'coz you'd never give it a try

You'd walk in and out of my life

And you'd hurt me bad at all times

Well, I guess you should stay off the line

Chorus:

Go away, I don't need you here with me

You keep hurtin' me like hell

Surrounds me over with flames

I'd let you go, I'd throw you off my heart and mind

But it's surely hard to deny

The way you make me feel

This pain seems so unreal

II.

Crying in front of you

Was such the foolish deed I've done

Stalking you, s**t, almost caught

Was such the worst thing

Weaker than me, you are

I wonder how you'd taken over

Silence covers us up

Oh, well I... kinda feel it awkward

Bridge:

You're the numbest I have known

You never feel what I have felt

'coz you'd never give it a try

You'd walk in and out of my life

And you'd hurt me bad at all times

Well, I guess you should stay off the line

Chorus:

Go away, I don't need you here with me

You keep hurtin' me like hell

Surrounds me over with flames

I'd let you go, I'd throw you off my heart and mind

But it's surely hard to deny

The way you make me feel

This pain seems so unreal

Coda:

Lovin' and hatin' you at the same time is so much trouble

I look so desperate and wasted at all times, it's not doing any good to me

Is this still real? I just wonder if we still exist in our world outside

This is too much; can you still call this love?

It only brings pain to my heart

Fill-in:

Go away, I don't need you here with me

You keep hurtin' me like hell surrounds me over with flames. . .

Last Chorus:

Go away, I don't need you here with me

You keep hurtin' me like hell

Surrounds me over with flames

I'd let you go, I'd throw you off my heart and mind

But it's surely hard to deny

The way you make me feel

This pain seems so unreal

-

This pain seems so unreal

This pain seems so unreal

Unreal

Reviews

[Scott Metro]

..just wondering.. what type of music would fit here.
Looks like it could for sure be a song...

Enjoyed it.
Scott

[Prime]

Thanks for Reviewing @Scott Metro.
This is a kind of pop music. Well, I recorded this with the mini-pops(rhythms) of my musical organ. It was not really good. Hehe.

I have a guitar version of this too.

[Scott Metro]

I write songs also...most of my posted stuff is reworked songs..I've had 4 published..2 recorded on albums...but now I hate the music business...lol
Enjoyed it.
Scott

[Prime]

Haha ! That's great then. Why'd you hate the music business anyway?

[Scott Metro]

Got ripped off twice..the two songs that got recorded...never go a penny for either one.
The business is full of users and takers..they have no qualms about stealing.
S.

[Prime]

Oops, sorry to have read that.

And that's one of the things I hate, PLAGIARISM.

[Scott Metro]

Check out Witch's Whispers on my page..it was originally a quasi Jazz type song...never tried to market it...my co-writer got pissed off at me and refused to sign a publishing agreement just to be vindictive......not sure if the song transitions over to a poem real well...but I wanted to throw something up on Christmas day.
S.

[Prime]

Oh, yea. I'll check it out. =D