Until You Can't Anymore

A poem about... like, a child with horrible parents pretty much.

Momma, Momma, can't you hear me?
You gave me up... you were only fourteen.
I think, didn't you ever wonder about me?
The thought of it just make me want to scream.

Momma, Momma, didn't you once miss me?
Sometimes I'll lay in bed and start to cry,
And think, was there ever something you liked about me?!
A vague memory, I believe you wanted me to die.

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Momma, Momma, Enter the world I know,
Spin faster and faster until the time ticks slow, until I get bored,
But please Enter the stands of my circus show,
Laugh until your body gets sore, until you can't anymore.

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Daddy, Daddy, you were such a beast,
Bloody fists handcuffed and you were only forty-five
When Momma called the police,
And you went to jail with this hard look in your eye.

Daddy, Daddy, don't you know I'm alive?
You missed momma's stomach with that damn bloody knife.
And He said, "Any regrets to confess, you got until five."
Admit to yours sins and for ruining Momma's life.

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Daddy, Daddy, Enter the world of fire,
It seems your soul has expired, and I know you're very tired,
So please Enter the stands of my circus show,
Laugh until your body gets sore, until you can't anymore.

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When Momma's not a w***e and Daddy settled his score,
I got very bored, so I finally left the Circus through the hidden trap door,
To find a place where I can laugh untill my body gets sore,
Until I can't anymore,

Until my soul is restored.

Author's Note

The original is horrible, trust me. This is actually decent, but forced. Still sucks as all my work. YAY! CONFIDENCE!!!

Reviews

[RedInk524]

You say this is decent, but i say it is awesome. I like the cocktail of hate, despair, and anger. I love the energy in it, that is what caught my attention the most. Makes me think of a little girl who has some kind of powers and uses it to put her parents through her own hell before sending them to actual hell. Sort of like slaying your own demons to cleanse your soul. I dont think it sucks, im favoriting. :D

[Dove]

Wow I have to like put my hands in the air after reading this poem. It is written so well and the words are so strong. Thank you somuch for sharing this! And please be more confident because the piece of writing right here does not suck!!

[twylight999777]

This is awesome. It's like the F*** You so many abandoned/unwanted children want to say to their parents. :D Great job.

[Hush Hush]

Duude that's awesome, reminds me of rap. Confidence boost up! well done, even though it's a bit scary I must say...Fave paragraphs ;)

Momma, Momma, Enter the world I know,
Spin faster and faster until the time ticks slow, until I get bored,
But please Enter the stands of my circus show,
Laugh until your body gets sore, until you can't anymore.

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Daddy, Daddy, you were such a beast,
Bloody fists handcuffed and you were only forty-five
When Momma called the police,
And you went to jail with this hard look in your eye.

Daddy, Daddy, don't you know I'm alive?
You missed momma's stomach with that damn bloody knife.
And He said, "Any regrets to confess, you got until five."
Admit to yours sins and for ruining Momma's life.