Grief plays heavy on the heart

Winter, like grief often lingers on. For Deb and mum

How patient spring who bides her time
whilst winter lingers on,
as yellow, white, break frozen earth
to a lone wren's sweet birdsong,
that carries through fog heavy air
'tween chestnut, birch and pine
to trail away beyond the eye
beyond all hopes of mine.
For winter like my sadness dwells
plays heavy on the heart,
oh how I wish this ache to cease
for the darkness to depart.

Author's Note

Not written in a while so please feel free to chip in to improve if you see fit :)

Reviews

[hazy]

Your words are almost musical in this one. The image of the wren singing is perhaps the most striking to me, because it offers hope but the narrator is still too far to be able grasp it. This poem is very beautiful and effective and I do not doubt I will come back to read it again soon.

[Gee]

Thank you Hazy

[AYVID N]

Dear Gee,

A beautiful description of the lingering winter, still flexing her muscles, keeping the patient spring at bay. Hope, though, lingers close by in the wren's sweet birdsong. This too shall pass, they say, and the cold season will give way but the winter in the heart is a more permanent one. When I think of my loved ones lost, I realize that the wish for sweet release is perhaps, wishful thinking. Those loved ones are missed at every significant life event, at every juncture. However, relief does come in moments of memories treasured.

I loved the poem and have no suggestions to make. It was great to read you after such a long while.

[Gee]

Thank you Divya, appreciate your kind words

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome Gee. Enjoy your week. :)

[emmajoy]

Seasonal pain and its darkness is hard to endure
Grief for any loss in life stays, however one tries . Especially for lost darlings. Is hard to feel what those missed would want for their precious people. Today, you'll know the date, turns the tap on tears. But,, we try to e to look back on times when smiles, laughter and silliness ruled the air.

No, not easy as your beautiful words say,
'to fade away beyond the eye - beyond all hopes of mine, - for winter like my sadness dwells - plays heavy on the heart - oh how I long for sweet release -for the darkness to depart.'

[Gee]

Good morning. Just back from breakfast/brunch with the three generations of lovely ladies. Been thinking about both mum and Deb these last few days, more so Deb and how she would have loved the second child, Poppy, who was born to Grace 6 months ago, my wife being her birthing partner. Life can be so cruel, as you know all to well.
Thank you for taking time out to read and comment on my words, you are very much appreciated.
Have a lovely Sunday

[emmajoy]

As you say, life can be so very cruel. 'Times when so many thoughts and feelings crop up.
Because the sun shone today and the birds sang, we had to smile. Hope you and your ladies find calm and smiles this week, Gee.

[Lorry]

There is no length of time to grieve or mourn Gee, despite what experts say. I still think of my grandpa every day and miss him so much and he died the year star wars came out.
They say that death when you're young can complicate things like the proper mourning process through your incomprehension, and that grief when older can make us reflect on our own inevitable end. You never hear them talking about how great these people were or how missed they'll be.
In other words, they don't half talk a lot of s**t and know about as much on the subject as astrology.
How much you miss them is how much you miss them. End of.
Sorry for your ongoing loss my friend.

[Gee]

Thanks Lorry.
Cannot get over the loss of the beautiful Deb, guess I will heal when I heal:)
Haven't been on here too much, cannot find words worthy of putting before folk that deserve more than shite :))
Hope you are keeping well up there in the land of snow and ice..

[Lorry]

I am. Well, as well as well can be anyway, for someone from the frozen North.
Been on a slow and steady health kick of keeping active but slow and steady rather than a sprint and eating less stodge, as well as just less of everything.
Lockdown gave me lethargy and eating through boredom. Long covid gave me memory loss and gut and lung problems and to cap that off, had the winter vomiting bug too.
Have a bit more energy now and feeling better, but thank the beard guy in the cloud we are over the worst of it and hopefully it takes the hint and sods off for good. 😊