It rained today

How deep is your love

The rain came today, heavy, persistent,
filling the air with the sweet smell of parched earth.
I took deep breaths, long, slow deep breaths,
my face turned to the heavens, eyes closed,
allowing raindrops to wash over my sun dried skin.
It filled the age chiseled cracks and creases,
ran through salt and pepper stubble
before dripping from a jaw line that refuses to acknowledge the onset of age.
I smiled to myself, thought of mum and
how she always commented on our "good genes"
age defying genes she said, but mums do don't they.
In her mind I was faultless, could do no wrong,
and if I did, well, she never let on verbally
but was unable to disguise the truth in her eyes.

She has been gone 14 months now and not a day passes
where she isn't in my thoughts,
these sometimes bringing smiles, other times tears,
and of late frustration.
Frustration brought on by my inability
to clearly recall her face, her features, smile...
It's as if I'm forgetting her, as if my love wasn't deep seated enough
to carry her with me through the rest of my life,
as her love carried me through mine, and this saddens me greatly,
has tears welling...

It rained today, raindrops washing my tears through salt and pepper stubble.

Reviews

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It's a heartfelt piece, dear Gee. Needs no tweaking. Your emotion shines through those raindrops and makes your readers feel your sense of loss. A sign of great poetry. Words like these just prove that your Mum is always in your mind and in your fingertips and on the page. In that regard you will never forget who she was. A beautiful write. Visually stunning and very touching.

[Gee]

Thank you :))

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Gee... Mothers always had that “twinkle” in their eye. When their Spirit leaves to a higher plane... we feel their Presence in a hundred or more ways... in the song of birds...
the scent of roses. Nothing can compare to her sighs ... now we must carry on to share with others the blessings of her smile. Lovely poem. gently, Pat

[Gee]

Thank You Patricia

[Ken Simm.]

You know I'm going to love this descriptive poem but as I live in the Highlands of Scotland I don't understand it. The first part at least the second I understand all to well and that is my primary reason for, (can I say) like this. Although that is not perhaps the right terminology.
As a completely iappropriate aside I saw one line and remembered a recent sho of a right wing rally somewhere were one good ol boy was holding up a sign saying I am better I've got superior jeans.
Sorry I shouldn't be flippant in a review of the heart reaching write.

[Gee]

Thanks Ken
Hope you are well

[T.S. Ulmus]

Ouch, my mother lives but with stage 4 cancer, and the thought of forgetting her face hurts so much. But I know it's reality. Thank you for putting this into words.

[Gee]

Thank you.
Tis a tough one when a mother pops her clogs, you think you are prepared, ready, however reality is so different :))
I'm so sorry to read your mother is so ill.

[Fairy Khan]

Wow!
This one has left me speechless. The emotions are so pure and deeply felt. Couldn't be any better.

[Gee]

Thank you for your kind words :)

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

This poem is really beautiful. Mother is the greatest gift to a human :)

[Gee]

Thank you Devansh

[Davidgeo]

You have good command over your descriptive capabilities. You always have.

[Gee]

I keep it simple and write as if I'm speaking, which seems the obvious thing to do but reading many on here it may not be that obvious after all :).
Hope you are keeping well Dave. I always enjoy seeing your name crop up on my page.
Thank you.

[Davidgeo]

Don't worry, we're all guilty of writing non sense that makes us sound like an a*****e at one point in time or another. It's never a matter of if, it's only a matter of when.

You can rarely go wrong with simple though. It's also a lot harder to do well than people appreciate. Have you ever heard of a fellow by the name of Thomas Merton? He translates a book of poems called "The Way of Chuang Tzu" that I think you would enjoy if you have not already. I read it once for a class a long time ago but I still keep it around for bathroom reading. It's good writing regardless but, simplicity and word economy are on fine display there in particular.

[Gee]

Hi Dave, I will Google and have a wee read.
Cheers

[Davidgeo]

You'll enjoy it, I am quite confident in that.

[Davidgeo]

I'm going to harass you until you at least read a little bit of Merton's interpretation of "Chuang Tzu". l

[Gee]

Good morning Dave.
I'm away on hols for a walk from Friday will seek him out and have a butcher's during that time...promise :)

[Gee]

...hols for a week

[Davidgeo]

Give me your address (privately), I will mail you a copy.

[Gee]

Tis a very kind offer Dave but have already contacted the mighty river, Amazon, have paid the princely sum of £6.17 for the book which should be with me Thursday at the latest

[Davidgeo]

I would of been doing the same thing. F*****g Jeff god damned Bezos..... we all can help but buy s**t off that a*****e one way or another, at some point or another.

[Davidgeo]

... for one reason or another

[Gee]

I think my wife, child and mother in law spent enough money with him during lockdown to buy yet another delivery van. They bought anything and everything from flour, which was in scarce supply, to furniture. It's far to easy to buy from him

[Davidgeo]

There is a very specific reason why America is seeing, by far, the largest increase of cases per day lately. If it was quantifiable.... I'm pretty sure we'd be setting the record for "poor leadership" right now.

[Gee]

You are as a nation 100% poorly led by a megalomaniac who freak :)

[Gee]

Ego freak..

[Davidgeo]

Thankfully, our founders foresaw this a couple hundred years ago. They don't have any real power, and the change will be like a tidal wave of re correction. This will end up benefiting the nation in the long run, our constitution was designed to do that very thing.

[Davidgeo]

(not the virus, I mean they saw the likelihood of electing a s****y president from time to time)

[barleygirl]

WOW! WOW! And WOW! This is by far the best of your "Mom" series & you've already penned some very strong unforgettable sentiments on this topic. In complete contrast to your own experience, my Mom died a year ago May & I still have not cried one single tear. I thought by now I might have had some kind of realization, as you express in this poem, about how she (and most moms) hold onto each kid's essence forever, so why can't we return the favor of our own attention? Your words are so forthright & poignant, about how she's slipping away, the details of how it happens, how it feels. This is priceless, as far as showing what it means to be human. I love how your poem starts in a different place & slowly edges over to this topic that's been haunting you all this time. I love how you aren't one bit shy about everything you're going thru . . . your revelations are a gift to the rest of us, especially for those who haven't had the experience of losing a Mom that's sorely missed (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gee]

There are certain poems that you wish certain folk to review and this was one I hoped you would read, and then to get such a kind review has me smiling broadly.
Thank you Margie, very much :)

[barleygirl]

I am honored! *gawrsh!* . . . You could always read-request, but my folder is up to 75 right now, too overwhelming to whittle down right now! Besides, I know what you mean, sometimes I write something with another writer in mind, put it "out there" & just want to wait & see if the universe brings this person to what I've written. Sometimes they miss it . . . oh well! It's nice not to over-manipulate everything. I'm glad I was in the right place at the right time this morning! (((HUGS)))

[Fran Marie]

No matter how
old we get..we
are still our mom's
baby..no one
will love you like
a mother does.

Such an honest
write of heartfelt
emotions..i can
relate..even after
years of my moms
passing I still
feel the pain

it rained today
what a beautiful
expression..
of love ones
missed


.

[Gee]

Thank you kindly Fran Marie

[Donna]

First I want to tell you how sorry I am for your loss. It's never easy losing a parent no matter how old you are my. I like how descriptive you are. Great poem Gee.

[Gee]

Good morning Donna, thank you.
It was especially hard losing mum as she raised 9 of us singlehandedly :))

[Donna]

Wow! 9 children to raise on her own! She must have been a very strong, caring , loving Mother!