Dickinson, Plath, and a twenty stone monkey

You gotta draw the reader in :)

Undeterred, bloodied not bowed,(after yet another poem bombed) he girded his loins. No point mithering he thought with pen poised above the blank sheet before him, this time I will be read, and this poem, my 23rd posted in two days, will be the start of my rise, a meteoric rise as predicted in my biog.
His biog read..
" Hi, my name is William Byron Shelley Brillianto.
I am an author, painter, sculptor, poet, producer, choreographer, director.
Welcome to my page. Prepare to be amazed and have your perceptions of all things art and arty changed. I AM THE FUTURE"..(toot, toot, toot, blow my own trumpet)
24 hours later, 3 views, 1 review which read..
" sometimes more is less. Tis the quality not the quantity that the reader seeks.
You would be better to pen 4 lines of substance with emotion than 4 pages of drivel and dross. And the title, this needs to cause a certain amount of intrigue so as to draw the reader in. For example " A Poem" ( your last title)holds little sway, doesn't get the reader to thinking, whereas a title such as " Dickinson, Plath and a twenty stone monkey" will have the discerning poet wondering as to what the hell that could be about.
Finally, can you paint ? "

Author's Note

More often than not I am drawn in to read a piece( if the author not known to me) by a titles that gets me to wondering.
Get quite a few folk who bemoan the fact they get few or no reviews so they post more and more of the same !

Reviews

[Gee]

Lol, I'm glad you approve ma'am. I remember landing here totally unsure of how my simple fayre would be received but was open to all and any help offered and made a point of reading the established " stars" so as to try and improve. This seems to be rare amongst quite a few of the newbies who land here now and seem to think that they are Gods gift and are not shy to tell everyone...how deluded.
Hope you are well and thank you muchly.

[barleygirl]

I find humbleness to be one of the great virtues that's gone by the wayside at times . . . (((HUGS))) The longer I've been here at the cafe (5 yrs now), the more I'm humbled!

[Ken e Bujold]

this is a hoot. I admit the title drew me in. Though what I especially loved was "hi my name is....sheer audacity of such a cleverly placed dig is pure magic

Ken

[Gee]

Thank you Ken

[Chris Shaw]

Such an entertaining read Gee and with a title like that, you sure pulled the readers in. I missed this first time round, but pleased to say I have caught up. Better late than never. Good Monday morning to ya and greetings to MK.

Chris

[Gee]

Thanks Christine. More piffle :))
Hope you are well m'dear

[Chris Shaw]

Fair to middling young man :)

[Lisasview]

Found words I have not read of yours yet... I actually, thought I had read everything you have submitted.
Really enjoyed this earlier work of yours Gordon..
Yes, drawing the reader in is so important.. Be it a story or a poem.. I heard something once about the first 5 lines being very important in a story..
Your title intrigued me...stone monkey....
Not getting reviews is terrible.. The mere fact that you have 335 views and only 27 reviews is ridiculous..but then again are we really leaving our poems on this site in the hopes of getting great reviews? But as I type this I realize that YES, reviews are important because if they are truthful then that helps the poet understand how his poems really make readers feel..and perhaps a reader might make a suggestion or two..
Ah well, just early morning thoughts...but see...your poem brought up thoughts in me..and that is good...
Lisa

[Gee]

Hi Lisa, I'm still surprised that I am read and reviewed.
Hope you are well.
Thank you

[Lisasview]

Why??
.....

[Gee]

I left school with zilch qualifications and the ringing endorsement of " you will ammount to nothing Stevenson" so to be read and favourably reviewed by some gifted folk on here is still a wee bit surprising 😎

[Lisasview]

Well, I only review how I feel😍
Lisa

[M. J. Smith]

Well observed. My comp teacher told me you have to snag the reader in one sentence. She also taught me the value of an unusual title. Of course, I'M still learning my craft. I applaud the wisdom and the humor. Well written.

[Gee]

Thank you MJS

[Jo Billygoat]

I can relate to titling draws the eye and agree a little. I tend to title my scripts to capsulate what I've written. If the title draws interest that is fine, my postings are simply a means to release pressure of never ending thoughts in my brain, imprisoned by my skull.

Should a perspective reader browse one of my scripts they may recall is like their first sip of spirits (wine, in that it's bitter sweet and want more; or a whisky, that burns and unless you like such a feeling you don't bother consuming more). I care not how a reader digests my scripts or if they decide to add more of my insights to their mental palate -- I only hope that I gave them something to think about.

[Gee]

I only wonder as to how my writing will be perceived once posted, but as this writing malarkey is just a way to pass a bit of time I'm non to fussed as to others reaction, although it is nice to bread and enjoyed.
Thank you for leaving your comments. By the way your avatars resembles quite a few of the women that I have woken up next to after a drunken night out :))

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha ya mardy bugger! Love the deeply sardonic nature of this witty and imaginatively well written little number. However 'not all coats have lapels' I post scores but do not really care if they largely go unread as I choose not to collect 'friends' unless I really like their work and they like to interact. Not sure these days I could reciprocate with a bunch of reviews anyway.

[Davidgeo]

I don't get enough reviews. Does this mean I will get more reviews?

I will eat your pets and urinate upon your soul.

I thought we were friends?

My neighbor said he's the president of black people.

I'm still mourning sean connery.

[Gee]

You get far to few reviews :)
We are friends, keyboard friends.
I will forever mourn big Sean
My neighbour said he's gonna kill your neighbour cos he wants to be the black folks President.
Please don't eat my pets but feel free to piss on my soul( or better still my feet as I have a severe case of trench foot...s****y construction sites)
Good morning young fella, hope you are keeping well

[Davidgeo]

Ha...

I'm still celebrating the fact that I no longer have to read twitter posts as a means to keep up with my countries politics. It's been a rough four plus years in that regard.

By the way, calling me young fella makes you an old person. And I actually get far too many reviews... I'm like, one of the worst people here.

[Gee]

I know, I am constantly reminded by others

[Davidgeo]

Old is young. I can barely walk up the stairs without drugs and I'm supposed to be young or something. If I know the specific history of doggerland does that make me an honorary member of euro history via catastrophe?

[Davidgeo]

We should have a drink at an airport somewhere one day.

[Papaya]

This is priceless and yes, this title drew me! (I have lousy titles usually)
But so true, easy fifty some to get lost in the sound of their own voice and it just sounds like drivel when they should have stopped while it's still interesting. (:

[Gee]

Good morning and thank you m'dear.
Hope all is well with you :)

[Papaya]

Good morning, G. Quite well thank you. :)
Hope the same for you!

[Gee]

Slightly hungover and smell like I've been oak smoked after 5 hours attending to a fire pit whilst entertaining friends :)) But a great time had

[Papaya]

Lol! Sounds like a great time. (:

[Gee]

Ayev, the best. Only 6 of us, but one couple we have known for 40+ years, they were the only two who attended our " secret marriage" he was my best( only) man. The other of
we have known for 25 years and I was best man at their wedding. We then went on honeymoon with them to Cyprus !
True friends :))

[Gee]

And that reads as though I am still drunk

[Papaya]

That reads awesome. :)

[Gee]

Guess we are lucky that we have folk like that who choose to let us share their lives :)

[Papaya]

Exactly. Those rare treasures, right? Very lucky. :)

[Gee]

Indeed. Folk that see without being asked to look and give with no thought of receiving.
They are two of the 4 couples we holidayed with back in February, 10 days in the Maldives...magical

[Neville]

Excuse me sir.. I have penned n posted precisely 3,422 today .. and as of now.. this exact moment in time, not a single one has seen the light of day or been assigned a this or that.. maybe tomorrow I should try a bit harder ............. maybe :)

[Gee]

LOL, just trying to prove that a title that gets the ol' mind to thinking will garner a read or two( perhaps not reviews mind)
Thanks Neville

[Neville]

I like you poem... I like it a lot.. but then I got a thing about monkeys :) x

[Gee]

Micky, Michael, Peter and Davy :)

[Neville]

I have been told on more than one occasion Davy Jones looked a lot like me .. but then I'm just a day dream believer..........

[Unspoken poet]

This is quite intriguing, I enjoyed this, my mind is at work now.
Awesome

[Gee]

Thank you. Did you have a good birthday

[Unspoken poet]

wasn't too bad